Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart represent percentage evaluations yearly spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.

overall in 1920, vacume cleane is most usefull in houseworks. Whereas, showea that washing machine is lowest percentage housework in house hold between 1920 and 2019.

Firstly, vacume cleaner 30% of households in 1920. Moreover, slightly increase in 1980 about 90% and then miner rise up 10% about 90%. Afterwards, showes that 2000 to 2019 same average of housework in households. In case, of refrigerator second most people prefer in houseworks 1920 0% consumption but than sharply increassed in 1960. And than increased 10% in 1980 and sill average in 2000. Further, washing machine some not prefer prefer according to other 2 applinances. In 1920 40% people useing machine in housework. Moreover, sharply in increase in 1960 about 70%, and then sill continues same of washinh machine in 1960 to 2019.

in conclusion vacume cleaner most people using in household

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the general topic and mention several appliance trends, but the response only minimally fulfils the task because the overview is unclear and some key comparisons are inaccurate. For example, you say the washing machine has the “lowest percentage” across the period, although it begins at 40%, while the refrigerator starts at about 2%. You also describe the vacuum cleaner as remaining at the same level from 2000 to 2019, which is accurate, but its rise is confused: it reaches about 90% in 1980 and 100% by 2000. The housework-hours series is not reported at all, despite being a major part of the charts. Give a clear overview of both charts and select accurate start, end, and turning-point figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview, sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Moreover,” and a concluding sentence. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the appliance descriptions are mixed together and the comparisons are not clearly grouped. Phrases such as “In case, of refrigerator” and “Further, washing machine” do not establish clear links between ideas, while “in conclusion” repeats an unclear claim rather than summarising the main trends. Separate the overview from the details, then use one paragraph for the appliances and another for housework hours. Within each paragraph, move consistently from the earliest to the latest year and use clear comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with some relevant chart language such as “percentage,” “increase,” and “sharply.” However, inaccurate word choice and spelling often make the meaning hard to interpret. Examples include “percentage evaluations yearly,” “most usefull,” “miner rise,” and “same average of housework”; these do not describe the data precisely. Several appliance terms are also misspelled, including “vacume cleane” and “applinances.” Aim for standard, precise expressions used in data reporting, such as “the proportion of households owning,” “rose steadily,” “remained stable,” and “reached 100%.” Check spelling carefully and avoid using “prefer” or “consumption” when describing ownership.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic time references, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently obscure relationships between figures. For example, “The chart represent” has subject–verb disagreement, and “vacume cleaner 30% of households in 1920” is not a complete sentence. Verb forms and sentence construction are also problematic in “Moreover, sharply in increase in 1960” and “same of washinh machine in 1960 to 2019.” Articles, plurals, and punctuation are inconsistently handled, as in “in household” and the comma after “In case.” Build clear sentences with a subject and verb, for example, “The proportion owning a washing machine rose to 70% in 1960,” and practise accurate past-tense reporting.

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