Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrates the changes happened in the ownership of electrical appliances and the time spent in householdwork every week in a country from 1920 to 2019.

It is clear that ownership of refrigerator rise drastically from 1920 to 1980 and then it was steady till 2019.

Purchase of vaccum cleaner also increased between 1920 and 2000. The number of hours in housework per week in every household declined dramatically from 1920.

In 1920 percentage of refrigerator brought was increaed to a peak of approximately 100%.Washing machine figures rise from 30 % to maximum of 100%. Purchase of washing machine increaed from 40% to around 70% and it fluctuated till 2000.

Number of hours spent in housework fell drastically from 50 % to aron

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad topic and mention several relevant trends, including the rise in refrigerator ownership and the decline in housework. However, the response reports key figures inaccurately: refrigerators did not reach 100% in 1920; they rose from about 2% to 100% by 1980. You also confuse the appliance series, claiming washing-machine ownership rose to 100%, when it remained around 65–75%. The overview is incomplete, and the final sentence breaks off before giving the endpoint for housework. The response is also 25 words below the required minimum, leaving important comparisons and details undeveloped. To improve, give an accurate overview of all three appliances and the hours trend, then support it with selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and detail paragraphs, and phrases such as “It is clear that” signal a summary. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the details are not grouped consistently: the third paragraph shifts between refrigerator and washing-machine figures, and some statements contradict one another. The final paragraph begins a relevant comparison but ends mid-sentence (“from 50 % to aron”), so the report has no complete ending. Use one paragraph for the main trends and separate detail paragraphs for appliance ownership and housework hours. Check that each sentence follows logically from the previous one and complete every comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “ownership,” “fluctuated,” “peak” and “declined dramatically,” so the reader can recognise the intended subject and trends. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings reduce precision: “householdwork” is not the natural term, “Purchase of” is unsuitable for describing the percentage of households owning an appliance, and “brought” appears where “bought” or, better, “owned” is intended. There are also misspellings such as “vaccum,” “increaed” and “aron.” Aim for accurate chart language and check spelling carefully; terms such as “proportion of households,” “ownership level” and “remained stable” would make the report clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some complete simple sentences and attempts a range of structures, for example, “It is clear that…” and “Purchase of vaccum cleaner also increased…”. However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are incomplete or difficult to interpret. In “ownership of refrigerator rise drastically,” the article and verb form are incorrect; “the number of hours … declined” also needs a clear, complete comparison. The final sentence is unfinished, while “Washing machine figures rise from 30 % to maximum of 100%” has unclear structure and article use. Use past-tense verbs consistently for the historical period, check singular/plural agreement and articles, and ensure each sentence has a complete subject and verb. A final punctuation and sentence-completion check would help.

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