Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the chart illustrars that how nmuch pople had electrical machines between 2019 and 1920 and how much time spent families in one country.

overall,firstly the prtcentage of washing machine was on top of the graph while in 1920, less people had vacuume cleaner and number of hours were steadily decreaed from 1920 to 2019.

the percentage of washing machine started from 40 in 1920.Then, steadily increased from 40 to 60 .Then,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the general subject and include two relevant observations: washing-machine ownership began at 40% in 1920, and weekly housework hours declined over the period. However, the response addresses the task only partially. The overview claim that washing machines were “on top of the graph” is not accurate across the period, since refrigerators and vacuum cleaners later reached higher ownership levels. The account stops after saying washing-machine ownership rose from 40 to 60, leaving the other appliance trends and most of the housework data unreported. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words, which limits how much of the charts you can summarise. Include a complete overview and select key comparisons across both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement is followed by an overview and then a detail about washing machines. This gives the reader a starting point, but the progression is not sustained because the final paragraph ends abruptly at “Then,” and the other chart information is not developed. Linking words such as “overall,” “firstly,” and “Then” show an effort to connect ideas, although “firstly” does not introduce a clear sequence and repeated “Then” makes the account mechanical. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and the main details, and group related trends—for example, appliance ownership together and housework hours separately. This would make the limited information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “percentage,” “washing machine,” “vacuum cleaner,” and “steadily increased/decreased,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors make the writing harder to read: “illustrars,” “nmuch,” “pople,” “prtcentage,” and “vacume.” Some phrasing is also imprecise, such as “electrical machines” for electrical appliances and “was on top of the graph” for the highest ownership figure. Aim for accurate chart vocabulary and varied trend language, such as “the proportion of households owning…” and “rose gradually.” Proofreading spelling and choosing more precise collocations would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both a complex opening clause and simple trend statements, but control is uneven. In “the chart illustrars that how nmuch pople had electrical machines,” the clause structure is faulty: use “The charts illustrate how many households owned electrical appliances.” The phrase “how much time spent families” also lacks a correctly formed subject and verb; write “how much time families spent on housework.” In “the percentage … started from 40,” the sentence needs a clearer grammatical construction, such as “The figure started at 40%.” Capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent, and the final “Then,” leaves a sentence unfinished. Practise complete sentences with accurate past-tense verbs and check punctuation before submitting.

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