Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the percentage of households with electrical appliances and number of hours of housework per week, per household between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, refrigerator began with the lowest point then, gradually rose and its peak point in 1980, and remain stable throughout the period. Vacuum cleaner sharply rise over the period and remain unchanged. Washing machine fluctuated over the period.

In 1920, washing machine started with the percentage of household at 40%, and then soared in the next eighth year from 60% to 70%. In 1980, it was declined slightly at just over 60%, and then, climbed in the next four decade at just over 70%. In 1920, vacuum cleaner began at 30%, and rose dramatically from 30 to 70%, in the four decade and overtook the machine in 1960. In 2019, vacuum cleaner was peak value at 100%. In 1920, refrigerator started at zero, in 1940, it rose gradually and overtook the vacuum cleaner at just over 50%. In next two decade it overtook the washing machine at 90%. In 1980, it soared at 100% and remain stable throughout the period.

In 1920, number of hours per week had the peak value at 50 hours, and declined from 50 hours to 20 hours in 1960 and declined to just over 10 hours per week in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main overall patterns: appliance ownership generally increased, while weekly housework fell from 50 to 11 hours. Several comparisons are also relevant, including refrigerators reaching full ownership by 1980 and vacuum cleaners reaching 100% by 2000. This gives the response a solid overview and supports the stronger aspects of the performance. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the refrigerator began at about 2%, not zero, and the washing-machine figures are described as rising “in the next eighth year,” although the chart shows changes across two decades. The overview also says the refrigerator peaked in 1980 without clearly stating that it then remained at 100%. More precise, consistently accurate reporting would make the coverage more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph describing appliance ownership, and a final paragraph on housework hours. The sequence from the general trends to specific figures is broadly logical, and time markers such as “In 1920” and “In 1980” help orient the reader. However, the repeated opening “In 1920” makes the appliance paragraph feel list-like, and some links between figures are difficult to follow, particularly “soared in the next eighth year from 60% to 70%.” The overview also combines several trends in a sentence with uneven connections. Grouping comparisons more deliberately and varying transitions would create smoother progression and make relationships between series clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “fluctuated,” “overtook,” “declined,” and “remain stable,” so the main trends are generally understandable. There are also attempts to use stronger trend language, such as “soared” and “dramatically.” However, some choices are imprecise or do not fit the data: “peak point” and “peak value” are awkward, while “sharply rise” is not the correct form for describing a past trend. “In the next eighth year” is also unclear and does not express the time interval accurately. Aim for precise collocations such as “reached a peak,” “rose sharply,” and “over the following two decades.” This would improve clarity and control without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can usually understand the comparisons and trends. However, some errors in verb forms and sentence construction remain. For example, “Vacuum cleaner sharply rise” needs a past-tense verb, and “its peak point in 1980, and remain stable” lacks a correctly formed verb sequence. In “it was declined slightly,” the passive construction is not appropriate; use “it declined slightly.” Articles and number agreement also need attention in phrases such as “the percentage of household” and “in the next four decade.” These errors do not generally prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Check tense consistency when describing past data and ensure each clause has a complete, correctly formed verb.

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