Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line chart illustrates the proportion of household with electrical appliances (Wahing machine, Refrigerator and vacuum calenear) and also number of hours of housework per week between 1920 and 2019.

Overall,appliances percentage increased considerably.Refrigerator and vaccum cleaner increased with the passage of time .Whereas, Washing machine fluctuated throughout.While, number of hours per week gradually decline.

In 1920,the percentage of Washing machine was 40% .While, refrigerator was at 30% and vacuum cleaner were never started yet. While reaching at 1940, the percentage of appliances climbed to 60% fo washing machine and approximately 55% and 50% for refrigerator and vacuum cleaner.In 1960 the percentage rose slightly for all three appliance at 90% for washing machine and 70% for both refrigerator and vacuum cleaner.And at the end on 2019, the proportion of washing machine was nearly to 76%.Similarly, refrigerator and vaccum cleaner reached at 100%.

On the other hand, numberof hours per week decline significantly. By 1920 the household hours per week was at 50% and then decrease to 35% in 1940 and 20% in 1960. And at the end of year reached to about 10% in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and give a relevant overview: appliance ownership generally rose, while weekly housework time fell. Several key figures are reported accurately, including washing machines at 40% in 1920 and about 75% in 2019, and the decline in housework from 50 to around 11 hours. However, some important details are misread: refrigerators were at about 2% in 1920, not 30%, and washing-machine ownership was about 70%, not 90%, in 1960. The overview also says washing machines fluctuated, but their overall pattern is a gradual rise with a modest dip around 1980. Include the intermediate housework figures for 1980 and 2000 to make the account more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on appliance ownership, and a final paragraph on housework. This makes the two charts easy to distinguish. However, progression within the appliance paragraph is sometimes disrupted by repeated and awkward transitions such as “While reaching at 1940,” “In 1960,” and “And at the end.” Several sentence fragments beginning with “While” also weaken the links between ideas. The overview is useful, but the body could group the appliance trends more logically—for example, describe the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner together, then contrast the washing-machine pattern. Use fewer repeated connectors and make comparisons explicit to improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “fluctuated,” and “gradually decline,” so the reader can generally understand the trends being described. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors reduce precision: “household hours,” “reached at,” and “never started yet” are not natural ways to describe the data. There are also misspellings such as “Wahing,” “calenear,” and “vaccum,” which make the writing look less controlled. Aim for accurate trend language and standard spellings; for example, say that ownership “stood at” a figure or “rose to” a level, and describe housework time in “hours,” not as a percentage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main message is usually understandable. However, some errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms recur. For example, “the percentage of household” needs a plural noun, while “vacuum cleaner were” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The sentence “Whereas, Washing machine fluctuated throughout” is not a complete, correctly punctuated clause, and “number of hours per week decline” uses the wrong verb form. Several sentences also begin with “While” or “And” without being properly connected to a main clause. Practise building complete sentences with accurate past-tense verbs and use commas and full stops to separate ideas clearly.

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