Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two line charts illustrated the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent was doing housework in households between 1920 and 2019.

Overall,the electrical appliances was rose grudually.But the refrigerator was sharply went up,while the washing machine was rise sharply.In addition,the number of hours of household was went down sharply.

In constant,the washing machine was went down in 1920 to 40% but it is went up gradually to 75% in 2019,while the refrigerator was went down in 2019 to 0 per but it was rose up gradually to 100 per in 2019,while in 2019 the vacuum cleaner was 30% but it is went up to 100%.

There was a dramatic change in numbers of hours.In 1920, these appliances was used 50 hours per week,but it is slowly went down and in 2019 it was reached to 10%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two broad trends: appliance ownership generally increased, while weekly housework hours declined. However, the account is only partial and several key figures or directions are inaccurate. For example, washing-machine ownership began at 40% and ended at 75%, but it did not fall in 1920; it dipped from about 70% to 65% around 1980. Refrigerator ownership rose from about 2% to 100%, rather than falling to zero in 2019, and the vacuum cleaner started at 30% before reaching 100%. The housework figure fell from 50 to about 11 hours, not exactly 10. The response also contains 129 words, below the required 150, with 12 prompt words excluded from the count. Include a fuller, accurate overview and select key stages for comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall shape: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about appliance ownership, and a final sentence about housework. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, progression within the appliance paragraph is difficult to follow because the descriptions repeat “while” and mix starting and ending values, sometimes reversing the trends. The opening overview also combines several trends without clearly distinguishing the three appliances. Use separate, logically ordered comparisons—for example, describe the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner together, then contrast the washing machine—and use time markers consistently. Check punctuation after linking expressions, as in “Overall,the”, and avoid relying on the same connector repeatedly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “ownership”, “gradually”, “sharply”, “dramatic change” and “per week”, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the trends hard to interpret. “In constant” does not express a contrast; “by contrast” would be suitable. “The number of hours of household” is unclear, and “0 per” and “100 per” are not appropriate ways to report percentages. There is also repetition of “went up” and “went down”. Build a small set of precise trend phrases, such as “rose to”, “declined from”, “remained stable at” and “reached 100%”, and use the correct unit for each series.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts connected sentences and uses time references, but grammatical control is weak and errors occur throughout. Verb forms are often incorrectly combined, as in “was rose”, “was went down” and “it is went up”; use a simple past form such as “rose” or “fell” for these historical changes. There are also agreement and sentence-pattern problems in “the electrical appliances was” and “these appliances was used 50 hours”, where the appliances themselves are not the subject of the housework-hours measure. The opening phrase “amount of time spent was doing housework” is also structurally faulty. Practise accurate simple past sentences first, then add clauses with “while” or “whereas”; check subject–verb agreement and punctuation before submitting.

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