Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Films play very crucial role if I talk about entertainment. However, few individuals believe that in present we can watch movies on mobiles or tablets there is no need to go to the movie theatre. Others think that films have to be seen on a big screen to be fully enjoyed. This essay will discuss both the view points and I am in the

favour of primary notion which i will explain in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, now people can see films on phone or tablets without going to the cinema. To explain it, in this modern era it is very easy to find any new movies on internet with which people are now saving their money and time. For example if people are going to watch any movie in theatre they need to buy ticket first and they have to travel to cinema which take allot of time any money. Moreover, individuals can easily pause, restart or fix volume of their movie by their own. Additionally They can also watch them anywhere they want like in car, bus, park or at home.

On the other hand,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response introduces the topic and gives a clear preference for watching films on personal devices, with relevant reasons such as saving travel time and money and being able to pause or adjust the volume. However, it addresses the task only partially: the cinema viewpoint is not explained at all, and the essay ends immediately after “On the other hand,” without developing the opposing argument or reaching a conclusion. The response contains 178 words, which is 72 words below the required minimum; the 10 words copied from the prompt were not counted. This shortfall leaves the ideas substantially under-developed. To improve, explain why cinema viewing can be more immersive, support both views with examples, and conclude by restating your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction is followed by a paragraph supporting personal-device viewing, and phrases such as “To commence with” and “On the other hand” signal the intended progression. Within the first body paragraph, the reasons are presented in a generally understandable order. However, the second viewpoint is only announced, not developed, so the essay has no complete progression or ending. Some linking is also mechanical, with “Moreover” and “Additionally” introducing a list of benefits rather than showing how the ideas relate. The opening sentence is not clearly connected to the discussion. Build a complete paragraph for each view, use referencing and transitions to connect reasons, and add a concluding paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a minimally adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “movie theatre,” “big screen,” “ticket,” and “pause, restart or fix volume.” These choices make the main points understandable, and there is some attempt to vary expressions by using both “films” and “movies.” However, several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “Films play very crucial role,” “primary notion,” and “allot of time any money.” Repetition of “people,” “watch,” and “movie” also limits flexibility. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling and word forms; for example, “a crucial role,” “the first view,” and “a lot of time and money” would be more natural. A wider range would also help explain the cinema experience.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if people are going to watch any movie in theatre” and a relative clause in “theatre which take allot of time.” These attempts show some structural variety, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include missing articles in “on phone or tablets” and “in theatre,” subject–verb disagreement in “which take,” and the faulty construction “with which people are now saving.” The opening also has an incomplete or awkward article pattern in “Films play very crucial role.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “Additionally They.” Practise accurate article use, agreement, and sentence boundaries, then proofread complex sentences for a clear grammatical structure.

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