Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays technology is on its peak in terms of electronic media and streaming as individuals see live matches, news or anything in their hand device. Many people are with this viewpoints, particularly in-terms of Cinema. While others oppose that there is no similar experience for watching films. Though I am highly agreed with the former view, both viewpoints have been discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with, the foremost reason for watching movies in phone and tablets is most convenient for individuals. Nowadays, residential area are located very far from industralised area to protect atmosphere and environment. As a result, everybody needs to travel lot by any mode of communication like bus, train etc. Hence they have ample of time while travelling the can easily start watching any films on theirs smartphones using headsets. Additionally, this practice save lots of time. Another benefits is watching movies in their phone is more cheaper then going to theatre for it. As everyone has easy access to internet and many and subscription to the websites like Netflix , Amazon and many more, where they can enjoy unlimited movies with minimum monthly fees.

Another side, watching movies in cinema is extraordinary experience for individuals. The spectators are there is are just there to watch movies which increase our interest and involvement. Unlike watching movies in phone, there is sound proof walls in theatre which prevent outside noise and disturbance. Also, going to cinema with loved once is one of the great outing entertainment. Also, individuals enjoying popcorns and drinks in theatre.

In conclusion, although I am so fond off watching movies in my personal device as it is so convenient and time saving, going out sometimes for cinema with loved once and family is wonderful experience.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both viewpoints and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding the convenience of watching films on mobile devices is clear, but the discussion of the cinema experience is quite brief and relies on simple observations like 'enjoying popcorns'. The position is stated in the introduction but becomes slightly contradictory in the conclusion, where you state you are 'so fond of' mobile viewing but then acknowledge the cinema as a 'wonderful experience' without clearly reconciling these two views. To reach a higher band, ensure your arguments are more thoroughly extended with specific examples or deeper analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Additionally', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'Another side' to introduce the opposing view, which should be 'On the other hand'. Furthermore, there are some issues with referencing and sentence flow; for example, the sentence 'The spectators are there is are just there to watch movies' is confusing and lacks clear cohesion. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'electronic media', 'streaming', and 'spectators'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'technology is on its peak' (should be 'at its peak'), 'more cheaper' (should be 'cheaper'), and 'loved once' (should be 'loved ones'). These errors are noticeable but do not generally impede communication. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word forms (e.g., 'cheaper' vs 'more cheaper') are used correctly according to standard English grammar rules.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('residential area are', 'this practice save'), missing articles ('in phone', 'in cinema'), and incorrect preposition usage. Some sentences are also structurally incomplete or repetitive, such as 'The spectators are there is are just there'. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading your work to catch these frequent slips in tense and number agreement.

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