Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this morden area smart phones give us every single things in minutes,while many chors think that wathching movies in phone is good option insted of going theater while other says that going cinema is better then watching at home.In this eassy I will disscus both of opinion and also include my choice.
Firstly , see films in smart phone is good option becuase it do not need to go outside we can enjoy movies with our favourate snacks at home and also it is cheaper as we not need to buy teckits even movie theaters has snacks options at very higher price, Further the volume is to high in cinema it is not good for health and for family it is good option for watching movie at home as I seen that one day I went cinema hall with my friend and i sit near by one family they also have two kids with that and one is very small in age so in the mid of movie they started crying everyone got disturbed even the family can not enjoy movie and leave the cinema before the end of movie.
On the other hand, watching movie in cinema insted of phones also have lots of fun because everyone have curiosity for going outsite, wearing new clothes.As in this busy era people do not have time for family so watching movie in theater give them opportunity to spend time with family.Moreover, watching movie in big screen has more fun then smaller screen.
Well, in my view watching movie in smart phone is good option insted of going outside as a lazy person I like to watch movie in phone because , I do not need to go outside from home and even I can see movie at whatever time without any planing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding cinema volume is anecdotal and lacks broader context. While the prompt is addressed, the ideas could be more effectively extended with more sophisticated reasoning. The position is consistent, but the supporting arguments rely heavily on personal preference rather than a balanced discussion of the broader societal or cultural implications of cinema versus home viewing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'Firstly', 'On the other hand', 'Moreover'). There are instances where the flow between sentences is disjointed, particularly in the first paragraph where the introduction of the topic is somewhat cluttered. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between the two main body paragraphs could be smoother to better reflect the contrast between the two viewpoints.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'morden', 'chors', 'wathching', 'insted', 'teckits', and 'planing'. The range of vocabulary is limited, often relying on basic descriptors like 'good option' or 'fun'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations and academic vocabulary to express your ideas, and pay closer attention to spelling accuracy, which currently impacts the overall quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other says'), article usage (e.g., 'in cinema'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement and spacing. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence boundaries and basic grammatical accuracy will significantly improve your score.
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