Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

When some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets ,while other say that to fully enjoy films need to be seen in a cinema I will discuss both my opinion on this topic.

According to me, it depends on various factors people who have good internet connection and want to watch on specific times when they want and not rely on specific show timings and don't want to leave the comfort of their house are more interested in watching at their home and do their household chores as well. Income also plays a major role when a family can watch a movie at home with minimum cost and make snacks at home and enjoy some people will agree to that.

On the other hand ,to be fully enjoyed films must be seen in a cinema ,based on personal experience when you watch in theatre we make ourselves available for that period of time and just focus on movie but while watching at home you get involved in other things that make the movie not priority and never complete the movie on time. Also to go to theatre you get dressed up when you go outside your daily hustle of work life gets a change mood gets refereshed and people spend money outside that benefits the economy as well.

I would conclude that decision of an individual or family to watch on phone or in cinema depends on several reasons mentioned above and can be enjoyed as per their convenience.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views regarding watching films on mobile devices versus the cinema. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention factors like cost and convenience for home viewing, and focus and social benefits for the cinema, these points are not fully extended with specific examples or deeper analysis. Your position is stated in the introduction but remains somewhat vague throughout the body paragraphs. To improve, ensure that each viewpoint is supported by a clear, distinct example and that your personal opinion is more explicitly integrated into the argument rather than just mentioned in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes mechanical. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is abrupt. There is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas within sentences and between paragraphs. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'some people will agree to that,' which does not clearly link back to the previous point. Improving the use of transition signals like 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'in contrast' would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'good internet connection,' 'make snacks,' and 'get dressed up.' There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'daily hustle of work life gets a change mood gets refereshed.' To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'cinematic experience,' 'technological advancements,' 'immersive environment,' or 'financial implications.' Spelling errors like 'refereshed' should also be avoided through careful proofreading.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. For example, the opening sentence is a run-on with missing punctuation and awkward phrasing: 'When some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets ,while other say that to fully enjoy films need to be seen in a cinema I will discuss both my opinion on this topic.' There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and missing articles. Focusing on sentence boundary punctuation and ensuring consistent verb tenses will significantly improve your accuracy.

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