Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Phenomenal,There are many optimistic perspective due to take watching films in phones or tablets another thinks people are more happy watching movie in cinema.Therefore,People are watching films in phones or tablets those are effects many detrimental views and waching movie in cinema optimistic views.This essay will discuss both perspective but I think cinems much better experience for watching films.
On the one hand, Thise days life is very fast every people life and They are not saficiant time spending going to cinema and watch movie few hours.However,People take time use for phones and tablets during watching some films.Although,There are many time save and flexible any time watch any pending episode.For example, In modern area,there are many people use online platform they are provide few days free watching films and then basic amounts pay during another upcoming movies.
On the other hand,While are must impotant in life how to better happy during whole life journey and one of entertainment people going to cinema and watch movie with friends or family members.Moreover,Humans go to the cinema it is provide many optimistic benefits like Comfutebule sitting, better sound system,big screen there are maltifarious comfortable views.Furthermore,one of most importantly during watching movie humans are decrease stresse and depression by watch movie in cinema.For instance,nowadays increase many online platform available any move esay way then watch movie easily but better and high performance watching experience in only for cinema.
In conclusion,Although they could impotant part of our life how to better experience in our life during watching any films in phone and cinema.Therefore,must priorities in our life better and sounds quality in cinema and tablets and phones not much more better performance by watching movies.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited by significant language barriers. While the prompt asks for a discussion of both views, the arguments provided—such as 'time saving' for phones and 'comfortable sitting' for cinemas—are somewhat superficial and lack depth. The essay covers all parts of the task, but the lack of clarity in expression prevents the ideas from being fully developed or persuasive. To improve, focus on expanding your arguments with more specific examples and ensuring your position is consistently supported throughout the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. While some linking words like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion' are used, they are often followed by sentences that do not flow naturally from the previous point. Referencing is also unclear at times, such as in the opening paragraph where the connection between the ideas is difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, which hinders the overall flow of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary range is limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous spelling errors, such as 'cinems', 'saficiant', 'Comfutebule', and 'maltifarious', and word choice is often inappropriate, such as 'optimistic perspective' used to describe a preference for phones. The student struggles to use less common vocabulary correctly, often resulting in phrases that are difficult to interpret. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your spelling is accurate, as these errors currently distract the reader from your main points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay relies on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are almost always faulty. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('there are many people use'), article usage, and sentence fragments. Punctuation is also problematic, with commas often used incorrectly or missing entirely. These persistent errors make the text difficult to read and understand. To improve, you must focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of tenses and prepositions.
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