Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Watching movies has changed dramatically , some people argue that it is convenient on cell phones while other believes that cinema is irreplaceable. In my opinion both sides have merits which I will discuss in my upcoming paragraphs .
On one hand , In last few deccads technology changed the way of life . People prefer to watch movies on their phones or tablets because they can watch their fevourite picture on their phone screens any where and any time For example , students or workaholics can watch it while commuting or in their free times . In addition , they can watch it free or can get subscription with less money .Moreover , they can rewind or forward the parts or can see any part more them a single time . Additionally ,
On the other hand , cinema has its own impression . Watching a movie on big screen with good sound effects and dark lights make it more enjoyable. People can watch some movies only in theaters like action movies . For an instance , Doom and KFG movies looking impressive in cinema halls because of their special effects . Secondly , people can go their with their families or friends .It is a good way to socialize with others .They can discuss about the story and directions .
In conclusion ,In my point of views both options has merits people who donot have enough time can enjoy their movies on their laptops and phones though cinemas are irreplaceable people can watch movies with their families
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the benefits of mobile viewing are listed, the explanation of why cinema is 'irreplaceable' is less detailed. The conclusion is quite brief and lacks a clear summary of the main arguments. To reach a higher band, you should ensure that your opinion is clearly stated and consistently supported throughout the essay, and provide more depth in your supporting arguments rather than just listing points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'On one hand', 'On the other hand', 'Additionally'). There is also a notable error at the end of the second paragraph where the text ends abruptly with 'Additionally,', suggesting an incomplete thought. Paragraphing is present but the transition between ideas could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, complete concluding sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'deccads' (decades), 'fevourite' (favourite), and 'any where' (anywhere). Additionally, some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'picture' to refer to a film and 'directions' when discussing film analysis. While the meaning is clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of spelling mistakes limit the score. Expanding your vocabulary to include more topic-specific collocations would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include punctuation errors (e.g., missing periods, incorrect comma usage), subject-verb agreement problems (e.g., 'other believes', 'both options has'), and missing articles. These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text, although they do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly subject-verb agreement and punctuation, and try to incorporate more varied, error-free complex sentences.
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