Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this era, some peoples view point regarding watching movies is that to watch in cinema is better where other believes that it is more enjoyable in their personal gadgets. Here I will discuss both point of view and I go with watch movies on phones.

In this busy life it is best way to enjoy movies in theatre because it helps them to reduce stress with their family and friends. secondly, inn cinemas the sound and view quality is better than their personal gadgets.

On the other hand, due to hectic schedule people not take out their personal time to go to cinemas so they can watch where ever they want. The best thing about to watch movies on phones is that they can replay their best part of the movie and they watch in parts which is not possible in theatre.

In cinemas there are limited amount of time of a particular which is not possible for everyone to go there.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 163 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both views and state an opinion, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack supporting examples. For instance, the point about 'reducing stress' is mentioned but not explained, and the discussion on personal gadgets is brief. To improve, you must expand each body paragraph with specific examples, logical explanations, and a more thorough exploration of the topic to meet the length requirement and provide a fully developed response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is limited due to the brevity of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'secondly' and 'on the other hand', but they are sometimes used mechanically or incorrectly, such as 'The best thing about to watch'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall flow is hindered by the lack of depth in the arguments. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'peoples view point' (people's viewpoint), 'personal gadgets' (used repeatedly), and 'limited amount of time of a particular' (which is grammatically incomplete). You need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms related to the topic of cinema and technology. Focusing on collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'some peoples view point', 'others believes', 'people not take out their personal time', and 'about to watch'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, you should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and sentence construction. Practicing the use of complex structures, such as relative clauses or conditional sentences, will also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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