Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few people say that now can see movies on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema others say that to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema. I will dicuss both point in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with. There are so many people busy in life. mostly people wacthing movies on phones because all movies and web series available in the enternet. To explain it Nowsaday young people very free in all time so always wacthing phones and laptop but not only but also people parper wacthing movies in phones because save timeing and money mostly big thing is very easy provide any type movie for the internet like funny, horror. so nowsaday old age people very like phones because spend all times in phones not only but also wacthing movies to releated history and old memories.

However there so mony types people in world world like some people like wacthing movies in cinema because remember old member and like old system. so nowsadays cinema very develop because more people like the movies wacthing every weekend because nowsaday all people very busy in life like, work, callage and old people healthy issue. so mostly childen very happy wocthing moive movie in cinema because enjoy with friends and family member. so mastly like cinema region sound very good and big screen. so nowsdays mastly people spend time in cinema wacth movies.

The calcusion I think nowsday very past deveoplement because phones and internet provide all getting all type moikes and so many types activits like games and music. I think very easy wocthing move ony tine and ony place. so nowsday mostly people very busy in work so not waste tuming so mastly people wocthing moive in phone

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. While you mention the convenience of mobile devices and the atmosphere of cinemas, the arguments lack depth and specific supporting examples. The position is somewhat clear, but the lack of logical progression makes it difficult to follow your reasoning. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed point with clear evidence or logical explanation rather than listing general observations. The conclusion is present but does not effectively summarize the main points or clearly state your final opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often inaccurate (e.g., 'To commence with.', 'The calcusion'). Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which disrupts the reader's ability to follow your argument. Referencing is often unclear, and the transition between ideas is mechanical. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words correctly, such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast', and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'enternet', 'Nowsaday', 'parper', and 'calcusion'. You rely on a very narrow range of words, often repeating the same terms like 'movies', 'phones', and 'nowsaday' throughout the text. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to technology and entertainment and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including missing subjects, incorrect verb tenses, and poor punctuation. Many sentences are incomplete or run together, such as 'mostly people wacthing movies on phones because all movies and web series available in the enternet.' There is very little evidence of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar are persistent. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence construction before attempting more complex forms, and pay close attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage.

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