Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Individuals prefer to see a lot of things for their entertainment such as movies, songs and vlogs. Some people believe that it is good to see the movie in cinema but other think that we can see the movies on electronic devices without going somewhere else.

some think that it is more excited or entertaining to see the films in the theatre. Firstly it gives a great experience when individual see the stories on the big protectors. All family member or a group enjoy the movie together at a one time. For example, The Time News do a survey which shows that 80% people like to see the film in the theatre. Moreover, person can spend a quality of time with family and friends, when they go together to see the movie. They eat together and discuss about their views of story with each other. As a result person can get a wonderful entertainment experience.

However, some believe that it is good to see the film on phone or tablet. People think that it is more convenient way to see the movie because there is no need to travel to cinema to see the story. Individual experience the movie at a home and it also save the time of travel. For example, Punjab Times say that people save their 30% time of a day without travelling. In addition, it also save the money. There is no need to get the tickets to see the movie. Therefore, it gives the individual good experience without spending any money or travel time.

I think that we can see the movie on electronic devices because it is more convenient. At present time, people have their busy schedule and they do not get a time for that things. So, they see the stories on i-pads easily. For example, I have work 6 days a week, then I prefer to stay at home on holiday.

In conclusion, individuals have their own thinking about experience movies. Some give preference to theatre but other give preference to electronical devices to see the movie.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, such as the social benefits of cinemas versus the convenience of home viewing. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the argument about saving time and money is mentioned multiple times in the second body paragraph. To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your points with more nuanced analysis rather than repeating the same benefits. The position is consistent throughout, which is a positive aspect of your writing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', 'However', and 'In conclusion' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'that things' in the third paragraph. The transition between the discussion of the two views and your own opinion could be smoother. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that pronouns clearly refer back to the intended nouns to improve the overall cohesion of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple, repetitive phrasing such as 'see the movie' and 'good experience'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'big protectors' (likely meaning 'big screens') and 'electronical devices'. While your meaning is clear, the lack of sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary limits your score. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to media and entertainment and try to avoid repeating the same basic verbs throughout your essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include article misuse ('at a one time', 'at a home'), subject-verb agreement ('Punjab Times say', 'person can spend'), and awkward phrasing ('discuss about their views'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic article usage and subject-verb agreement, and try to incorporate more complex sentence structures with greater accuracy.

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