Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this technological advanced world, multiple mediums of entertainment are available at the tip of the finger. While general public stats that experiencing the movie on the big screen cinema is absolutely visual treat to the eyes. However, arguements from the other part of the audience is that, watching the movie on tablets or smartphones is very excessible with our utmost comfort. I firmly believe that we have various types of contents suitable for any formats, its totally depend on the audience perspective.

First of all, movie enthusiats prefer to visit cinema to witness the films on the bigger projection screens, such as IMAX, DOLBY VISION and HBR BY BARCO this screens provide immersive audio-visual experience with 4K laser projections. I always select cinema to enjoy any visual spectacular movie to enjoy with my closed one, this is a outing culture in India, where friends and families get together, especially for movie. The market share of multiplex cinema has soared to sky after the COVID PANDEMIC, thus there is large of chunk of viewers for bigger screens are present.

To commence with, nowadays multiple forms of entertaintment are available to consume for the audiences, such as web series, TV shows and shortfilms, also not all the media content are surely fit into the cinema. This has majorally afffected by the lengthy storytelling, budget and scale of the movies, for that purpose it has different modes of showcasing of the contents in platforms like primevideo, netflix, joihotstar and youtube. India has seen the growth of web series and regional movies, because of massive consumption from audience with the smartphones, TV and tablet, important reason for this phenomenon is affordable internet cost bundle with subscriptions.

Overall into this, general population must have choice for their convenience and as per their comfort. In current market all demands are met with all the consideration by entertaintment companies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the first body paragraph effectively discusses the cinema experience, the second paragraph regarding home viewing is less focused, drifting into a discussion about content types (web series vs. films) rather than focusing on the viewing experience itself. The conclusion is also quite brief and lacks a summary of the main points. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph directly supports the prompt's core question about the necessity of the cinema experience versus home convenience.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First of all' and 'To commence with', though some transitions feel slightly mechanical or misused, such as 'Overall into this'. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two viewpoints. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the internal logic within paragraphs is tighter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some attempts at topic-specific terminology like 'immersive audio-visual experience' and '4K laser projections'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'technological advanced world' (technologically), 'general public stats' (states), and 'soared to sky' (soared to the skies). Some phrasing is non-idiomatic, which occasionally hinders the precision of the argument. Expanding the range of vocabulary and focusing on correct collocations would significantly enhance the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('this screens provide'), article usage ('the big screen cinema'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed with grammatical accuracy.

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