Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In todays, rapidly evolving world, the unparallaled significance of watcing films on phone and tablets over cinema has sparked considerable debate among individuals. While there are valid arguments both in support of and against this issue, it remain a matter of social pirorties, and broader golbal trends. Some pepole believe phone reduces the need to go in cinema, other argue only we should watched movies in cinema. This eassy will explore both in detail before presenting a resoned conslusion.
Supporters who see filims on phones/tablets argue numerous reasons regarding there point. First they delighted to feel how they are saving a major portion of there income rather to spend on this activity. Other is they do need to wait in long ques to purchase tickets and spend a specfic time from the routine. Cell phones give them a liberty to entertain themselves they want. For example, Netflix allow viewvers to watch upcoming shows, dramas, and seasons and another function is anyone can download whatever they want.
On the other hand, critics concede that movies need to be seen in cinema becasue it will give you a broader vision to the story. It also enhance the focous and reduces your stress so you can fully entertain yourselves. Most important part is it will change your perpesctives, and polishes your persenolity. For example, the actors and individuals will earn a handsome figures; also it boost our economy and film industry.
In conclusion, it is evident that both perspectives on watching films hold significant weight and deserve thoughtful reflection. A balenced approach that respects both public curiosty and personal privacy is most reasonable solution.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on watching films (on mobile devices versus in the cinema) and provides a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For instance, the second body paragraph lists reasons such as saving money and avoiding queues, but these points are not fully extended or supported with deeper elaboration. The student takes a stance, though the conclusion introduces a confusing mention of 'personal privacy' which is not entirely relevant to the prompt. Overall, the task response aligns best with Band 5 due to the limited and under-developed nature of the ideas presented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, showing a clear attempt at a conventional structure (introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion). However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical cohesive devices. For example, 'Supporters who see filims on phones/tablets argue numerous reasons regarding there point. First they delighted...' demonstrates faulty cohesion and referencing. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is often inadequate or inaccurate, leading to a choppy reading experience. This places the response firmly in the Band 5 category for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and limited, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede understanding. Examples of errors include 'todays' instead of 'today's', 'unparallaled', 'watcing', 'pirorties', 'golbal', 'eassy', 'resoned', 'conslusion', 'filims', 'ques', 'specfic', 'viewvers', 'focous', 'perpesctives', 'persenolity', 'balenced', and 'curiosty'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary (e.g., 'significance', 'perspectives'), the high frequency of spelling mistakes and inaccurate collocations ('spend a specfic time from the routine') restricts the lexical score to a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is very low throughout the response. Frequent errors include missing articles, subject-verb agreement issues, incorrect prepositions, and tense confusion (e.g., 'it remain a matter', 'only we should watched movies', 'First they delighted to feel', 'rather to spend', 'Other is they do need to wait'). These errors are pervasive and often cause difficulty for the reader, matching the description for Band 4 where errors are frequent and sometimes strain meaning.
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