Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed , films need to be seen in a cinema. In this essay we disscus both veiws and also share my own idea regarding this issue
firstly we discuss why people like to go cinema, in early days people do not have mobile phone and tablets so they move to cinema for entertainment. they make their plans and spend time in cinema. for example people living in a rural area donot have mobile, tablets infact they don not have T.V, to watch daily news. so they enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. this will be a programe event with friends
Nowadatys world become a global village. everybody using mobile phone or
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping abruptly at only 143 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the introduction attempts to outline both views, the body paragraphs remain severely underdeveloped and incomplete, trailing off before the essay can properly discuss both sides or present a clear personal opinion. There is an attempt to introduce relevant examples regarding rural areas and mobile technology, but these ideas are truncated. Because the length requirement is significantly unmet and the content is incomplete, this performance corresponds to a Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text shows some basic organizational structure with transitional markers like 'firstly' and an introductory framing. However, the overall arrangement is heavily disrupted by the premature ending of the response. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the main body merging into an unfinished thought. Cohesive devices are minimal, and referencing is unclear in places, such as in the sentence 'so they enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema'. Due to the lack of logical progression and complete development, the coherence and cohesion of the text align with a Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms such as 'films', 'mobile phone', 'entertainment', and 'people'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'disscus', 'veiws', 'donot', and 'Nowadatys'. The lexical resource is limited and minimally adequate for conveying very simple meanings, but the lack of range and the presence of basic errors restrict the score. This performance fits the Band 4.0 descriptor for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences linked with basic conjunctions. There are numerous punctuation and capitalization errors throughout the text, such as the complete lack of capital letters at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'some people say...', 'firstly we discuss...'). Grammatical errors and missing elements are frequent, and because the text cuts off mid-sentence, complex structures are virtually absent. This control of grammar and punctuation corresponds to a Band 4.0.
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