Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
My point of view films do not need to go cinema hall but we saw flim in your phone we are not more enjoy because mobile phone screen is to small two can saw a flim easy two or more friends can saw a flim i prefer to go to cinema hall because they gave more fasclities for example ac chiler popcon and fast food you pay and get them most of people to go cinema with group of friends fmily and couple lot of time i see a flim in cinema hall but i dont go to alone i go with my best friend during the a short break you need bottle lays and everythings you go to canteen and buy them last week i saw a horror movie resent evil this flim is very famous this day the house is full during this movie a lot of fun many people is nervous in this flim many dangraus and horror seen in thius flim one fmily come to saw this flim in this fmily two children come in half time after start the film the most horrorable seen saw the children than children start crying cinema hall provide very comfortable chair with very reasonable price but cackliner is minner expenceses because the chair provide leg rest this chairs is upper of the cinema other chair be comfortable but this chair is more more comfortable i prefer to visit cinema and buy this chair ticket every friday new film relize in this cinema some people has own opinion but my opinion cinema is batter than phone
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding whether films should be watched at home on phones or tablets versus going to the cinema, and it provides a personal opinion in favour of the cinema experience. However, the task achievement is hindered by significant limitations in development and clarity. While the candidate mentions reasons for preferring the cinema, such as screen size, food options, and social aspects, the ideas are presented in a very fragmented manner. The position is discernible—the writer prefers the cinema—but the lack of structured paragraphing and underdeveloped argumentation place this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The overall organisation is severely impacted by a complete lack of paragraphing; the entire essay is written as a single, continuous block of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying heavily on run-on sentences and stringing clauses together with commas rather than full stops or appropriate conjunctions (e.g., 'two can saw a flim easy two or more friends can saw a flim i prefer to go to cinema hall'). There is no clear logical progression between ideas, making the text difficult to follow at times. This corresponds to the Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words like 'see', 'film', 'cinema', and 'friends'. There are numerous spelling errors and non-standard lexical choices throughout the text, such as 'fasclities' for facilities, 'chiler' for chiller, 'dangraus' for dangerous, 'relize' for release, and 'cackliner' (likely meaning balcony or recliner). These errors often strain the reader and obscure meaning, reflecting a performance characteristic of Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences and run-on clauses joined by commas without appropriate subordination or punctuation. There is a persistent absence of sentence boundaries, capitalisation, and correct verb forms (e.g., 'many people is nervous', 'many dangraus and horror seen in thius flim'). Frequent structural errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader throughout, aligning with the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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