Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, people are mostly prefer film by cinema and other application in the phone. some individuals believe that people are generally watched movie by our phones or tablets , they cannot prefer to go to the theater. while, other people argue that cinema should be provided fully entertainment and enjoyed during watching movies. From my perspectives, I agree with both statement, but I generally prefer first statement because of in the mobile should be again repitations and not ant particular fix time.

To commence with, People are often watched movies by smartphones or tablets. First and foremost, people are more comfortable to watch movies at home. In home, individuals should watched movies with again repitations and with pauses. For example, during watching movie , that time any other calls and doing any works that time pause the movie and after completed again started to movies. Furthermore, in tablets cannot purchased any tickets. However, film are seen free of cost.

On the other hand, Teenagers are mostly prefer to watched movie in cinema. There are several reasons to watched movies in theaters. Firstly, They can provide a fully enjoyment of atmospheres. In cinema prefer to seen movies because better quality and some quality time spend with friends. They can provide a breath-taking sound that like a realistic sound that why teenagers and yongesters are mostly prefer cinema.

In conclusion, both are equally important to watched movies. Although watched movie at home on our phones or tablets both are more convenient and comfortable rather than to watched cinema.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views: the first body paragraph gives reasons for watching at home, such as pausing a film and avoiding ticket costs, while the second mentions cinema sound and spending time with friends. Your own preference is stated, but it is not fully consistent: you say you agree with both views and prefer the first, then conclude that both are equally important. This makes your position less clear. Some points also need fuller explanation—for example, explain why convenience matters to you or how the cinema experience makes a film more enjoyable. Develop each reason with a clear example and maintain one consistent opinion throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To commence with,” “Furthermore,” and “On the other hand” help signal the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or linked unclearly. For instance, the home-viewing paragraph moves from comfort to pausing films and then to free viewing without clearly showing how these points connect. Some transitions, including “while” at the start of a sentence, are awkwardly used. Organise each paragraph around one main reason, explain it, and use clear references and linking phrases to show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “smartphones or tablets,” “tickets,” “quality time,” and “breath-taking sound.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “fully enjoyment of atmospheres” and “realistic sound.” Repetition of “watched movies” and “prefer” also reduces flexibility. Spelling errors such as “yongesters” and the unclear phrase “again repitations” make parts of the message harder to understand. Build a bank of natural topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “a more immersive experience” to describe cinema sound and atmosphere.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional-style example about pausing a film when a call comes in. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “people are mostly prefer,” “individuals should watched,” and “They can provide a breath-taking sound,” where verb forms or sentence structure are faulty. Agreement and articles also need attention, as in “film are seen” and “in the mobile.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly after full stops. Practise accurate present-simple forms and basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences using conjunctions while checking each clause for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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