Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is argued that today, individuals can use their smartphones and laptops to enjoy any kind of movies, while others believe that people only can have a full enjoyment of wactiching in a cienma. Although, watching films on a large screen provides a more enjoyable experience, using personal devices to see films is affordable and convenient.

On the one hand, watching films on personal devices can be affordable and convenient. When people use their smartphones, there are plenty of applications that provide people with a free access of watching films, such as Youtube. As a result, not only, money is saved, but also people do not need to travel. For example, watching films on tablets allow people to pause and replay any time which could not be done in cinemas. However, I think that different applications offer people various variety of films and TV shows in low price, so they should watch on phones rather than going outside.

on the other hand, cinemas provide an environment that is difficult to recreate at home. A large screen and powerful sound often give an experience of reality as people's favouirte characters are front of them. In addition, a high quality of picture provides a very clear view that is very important when actions and romantic films are watched. For example, it is often shown that going to cinema can be a social activity, as friends and families can enjoy lots of recreational activities to develop their bonding stronger than before. I believe that cinemas are crucial to meet new people in order to build new relationships.

In conclusion, although watching films on phones can provide lots of comfort and save people's time, the real experience of watching moive can only have in cinemas and cinemas also help people to enjoy other people's company to make new friends.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear overall preference: the introduction recognises the appeal of cinema while favouring personal devices for affordability and convenience, and the conclusion states that cinemas offer a more complete experience. Relevant support includes free film applications and the large screen and sound in cinemas. However, the two positions are not developed equally clearly. The point that apps offer variety and low prices repeats the affordability argument, while the claim that cinemas help people meet new people is not fully explained or connected to the enjoyment of films. Your opinion also shifts: you favour devices in the introduction but conclude that the real experience is only available in cinemas. Make your position consistent and explain each main reason with a specific, clearly linked example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “on the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the overall progression easy to follow, and examples generally appear alongside the relevant point. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement and shows some of the clearer progression associated with a stronger performance. However, connections within paragraphs are sometimes mechanical or unclear: “As a result, not only, money is saved” is awkwardly linked, and “However” introduces a point that does not clearly contrast with the preceding sentence. The shift in your opinion between the introduction and conclusion also weakens the overall progression. Use linking phrases to show precise relationships and maintain one consistent line of argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to discuss the issue, including “affordable,” “convenient,” “large screen,” “powerful sound,” and “social activity.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and you attempt some less common expressions such as “recreate” and “bonding.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “wactiching,” “cienma,” “favouirte,” and “moive” are misspelled, while “full enjoyment” and “various variety” are unnatural or repetitive. Some phrases, such as “develop their bonding stronger,” are difficult to interpret smoothly. Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than adding complexity: for example, say “a more immersive experience” or “strengthen relationships.” Proofreading spelling and avoiding repeated wording would make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a concession in “Although, watching films on a large screen…” and a conditional relative clause in “which could not be done in cinemas.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect fluency and occasionally make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “people only can have” (word order), “a free access” (article and noun pattern), “watching films on tablets allow” (subject–verb agreement), and “the real experience … can only have in cinemas” (missing passive construction). Punctuation also needs attention, particularly the comma after “Although” and the inconsistent capitalisation of “on the other hand.” Practise accurate clause patterns and agreement, then check each sentence for a complete verb structure.

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