Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Technology has brought so much flexibilty in people's lives as they get to relax in the comfort of their homes and enjoy the beauty of the world from a distance. On the other hand, going to a cinema takes planning and scheduling in advance which can be impossible for busy people. The discusion is about watching films on small gargets versus going to a cinema.

Phones and tablets are portable making it possible to watch films from anywhere and at the time of chioce. It gives people a room to plan and replan their watch. For example, if one is too tired to watch a planned movie they can easily reschedule. When tired during the course of watching, they can stop and find another time to finish the movie. This saves money and time especially to people like me who work monday to friday full day and always keep my weekends to myself for resting. However, the screens are too small, which is not health to watch for long resulting in straining one's eyes.

Cinema's on the other hand usually stream the fresh films that are not on other platforms which gives the enjoyment of experiencing its freshness. I watched Raya the last dragon at the cinema when it was first released and the satifaction of having the first information was amazing. later on, it was shared on different platforms where people would watch it after going through the reviews. The negetive side of cinema is once the film is announced to be released, one has to adhere to their restrictions or they will miss it.

Phones and tablets provide more advantages to watch a film than going to a cinema. I will choose its flexibilty which allows me to make instant changes than when paid up for a cinema you have to be available and may travel long distances to go there. People should choose what works better for them according to their choices.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for watching films on phones or tablets, especially in the conclusion. The points about flexibility, pausing a film, and cinema screenings offering newly released films are relevant, and the Raya example gives your discussion a personal detail. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the cinema experience is mainly represented by seeing a film early, while the distinctive viewing experience of a cinema—such as its large screen, sound, or shared atmosphere—is not explored. The claim that small screens are unhealthy is also brief and could be explained or supported. Develop these points and make the comparison behind your opinion more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs on portable devices and cinemas, and a concluding opinion. Examples generally follow the points they support, so the reader can follow the discussion. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical, however, with repeated transitions such as “On the other hand,” “However,” and “The negative side.” Some references are also unclear: “its freshness” and “the first information” do not precisely identify what is being experienced, and “it” in the final paragraph could refer to a film or to the devices. Use more precise referencing and connect the paragraphs through direct comparison, rather than relying mainly on contrast markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary, including “portable,” “reschedule,” “restrictions,” and “straining one’s eyes,” which helps communicate the main ideas. There are also several inaccurate or unnatural choices that limit precision, such as “a room to plan and replan their watch,” “first information,” and “the beauty of the world from a distance.” Spelling errors—including “flexibilty,” “discusion,” “gargets,” “chioce,” and “negetive”—are noticeable and reduce the overall control of vocabulary. Aim for natural collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe the flexibility to “pause or reschedule viewing” and the cinema’s “immersive experience.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including conditional clauses (“if one is too tired…”) and relative clauses (“which allows me…”). Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors and awkward sentence constructions reduce accuracy. For example, “Phones and tablets are portable making it possible” needs punctuation before the participle clause, while “the screens are too small, which is not health to watch for long” has an unclear clause structure. In “when paid up for a cinema you have to be available,” the opening phrase is not grammatically connected to the main clause. Review clause construction, agreement, and punctuation, and revise sentences so each modifier clearly refers to the intended subject.

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