Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

I am writing a letter regarding a job in a local company that is best suit for you.

Firstly, I found your letter which makes me happier because you want a job here. So, I look around and find a job in a local industry where you have to work as a machine operator and you have to work in very hot temperature around 30 to 35 c. Also, you have to put loading and unloading work when machine are at start and finish point.

In addition to this, I think you loved this job because I know u like field work and mechanical work so I think it is best for you. Moreover, it is valuable job for your permanent residence in this country and you can stay longer that you want, so I think it is good job for you.

Furthermore, if you want this job then you have to fill up online form on company's website before 20th December 2026. you have to submit all your documents, signature and digital photo that require to fulfill form. I want to see you soon.

Yours Faithfully,

Prayag Patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you describe a machine-operator role and its loading and unloading duties, explain that it may suit John’s interest in practical and mechanical work, and give an online application deadline and document requirements. The purpose is clear and the details are relevant. The explanation of suitability is less fully developed, however: the claim that the job could help with permanent residence is important but not explained or qualified, and the work description could clarify the company or role further. The letter also needs a more complete closing instruction, such as where to find the vacancy or whom to contact. The main task is covered, with some ideas needing clearer support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible order: you introduce the job, explain why it may suit John, and then describe how to apply. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and connectors such as “Firstly,” “In addition to this,” and “Furthermore” make the progression easy to follow. However, the linking phrases are somewhat mechanical, and the opening sentence repeats the idea of writing about a job without adding much. Some references are also unclear, particularly “when machine are at start and finish point,” which makes the sequence of duties difficult to picture. A more natural letter structure, with smoother transitions and clearer links between details, would strengthen the overall flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main information, including job-related terms such as “machine operator,” “loading and unloading,” and “online form.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations sound unnatural, which sometimes makes the reader pause. For example, “best suit for you” should be “best suited to you,” “in very hot temperature” could be “in high temperatures,” and “valuable job for your permanent residence” does not clearly express the intended benefit. Informal “u” is also unsuitable for a friendly but carefully written letter. Aim for more precise, natural phrases and check word forms and spelling, including “company’s” and “December.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and longer clauses, for example, “I think you loved this job because I know u like field work and mechanical work,” so there is some attempt to connect ideas. Meaning is generally understandable, but errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries remain. Examples include “when machine are” (the noun and verb do not agree), “I found your letter which makes me happier” (the tense shifts), and the lowercase “you” after a full stop. The sentence beginning “Moreover” also joins several ideas without clear grammatical control. Review subject–verb agreement, consistent tense, and punctuation, then practise combining clauses accurately.

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