Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Friend,

I am writing to you about finding my job in your country.

Firstly, I was study abroad since 2025. I was student of English department but now I am finding the new job in your country. I wanted to job as a manager in company.

Secondly, I have more experience about manager responsibilities. I handle the all employer problems easily. I also completed projects on time. I earn more money when I worked in this company. Moreover, I liked this company rules and regulations. So this is suitable for me.

Finally, I send all documents on yours WhatsApp number. You apply on company website. You send to them my CV, I'd card number. When you tell me about this job then I go there for interviews because I wanted to work in your area. I think company would be hire to me because my qualification, and all documents are in better condition.

Your faithfully,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The letter makes an attempt to discuss a job, the writer’s experience and an application process, but it does not fulfil the central situation in the prompt: your friend is seeking work, and you should recommend a job to them. Instead, you write, “I am finding the new job in your country” and say the position is suitable “for me.” This makes the purpose and intended applicant unclear. The job itself is only identified as “a manager in company,” with little explanation of its duties, and the application instructions mix sending documents through WhatsApp with applying on a website. To improve, address your friend directly, describe the actual vacancy and its work, connect its requirements to your friend’s skills, and give clear, consistent application steps.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, signalled by “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Finally,” and it is possible to identify separate topics: background, experience and applying. However, these links are mechanical and the progression is weakened by the shift between discussing your own job search and advising your friend. For example, “I send all documents on yours WhatsApp number” does not clearly connect to the instruction that follows, “You apply on company website.” Paragraphing is also limited, with the main points presented as one continuous block. Organise the letter into clear paragraphs for the vacancy, why it suits your friend, and how to apply; use pronouns and transitions that make the intended applicant clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for employment, including “manager,” “responsibilities,” “projects,” “CV,” and “company rules and regulations,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which makes the intended meaning less clear. “I wanted to job as a manager” and “I handle the all employer problems” do not express the ideas naturally; “I’d card number” is also unclear and may not be appropriate information to request. Choose precise job-related expressions and avoid repeating general terms such as “company” and “job.” For instance, describe the role as managing staff or coordinating projects, and refer to the friend’s relevant experience rather than your own.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response uses mostly short, direct sentences and attempts some longer structures with “because” and “when,” such as “When you tell me about this job then I go there for interviews.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but errors in verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence construction are frequent. Examples include “I was study abroad,” “I was student,” and “company would be hire to me.” There are also awkwardly joined clauses, as in “I think company would be hire to me because my qualification, and all documents are in better condition.” Practise accurate past and present forms, article use, and complete clause patterns. For example: “I studied abroad” and “The company may hire me because of my qualifications.”

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