Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
- say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
- explain how to apply for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 7.0)
Dear Mike
I hope this letter find you well. I was so happy when I receive your letter. Definitely, I will help you to find job in my country.
To begin with, I would like to draw your attention to one of the reputed company of Canada. Company name is ParaMed - healthcare company, they do have multiple branches all over the Canada. Mainly they providing care to the citizens at their living area. For instance 'Personal Support Worker', Nurses. In your letter you have mention that you are holding 5 years experiences in nursing field and you will be amaze by knowing that they do have job opening as they are going to open another branch at Brampton area. Even which is very near to my home.
You can apply for this job through online portal. Even you can apply via Linkedin - career website. Working in same field will also help you in future. After getting some local experience may you can apply for Government job.
In sum up, I hope above details will help you. If you require any future information then feel free to contact me. Please give my regards to your family members.
Yours lovingly,
Shirish Khatri
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly identify the job at ParaMed, explain why it is suitable given your friend's nursing background, and provide instructions on how to apply via online portals. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, maintaining a helpful and encouraging stance throughout. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly on the nature of the work, such as describing the specific daily responsibilities of a Personal Support Worker, which would provide more depth to your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task, which helps the reader follow your points easily. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'For instance', and 'In sum up' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Even which is very near to my home'. Improving the flow between sentences by using a wider variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence of the letter.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'reputed company', 'healthcare', and 'online portal'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'I hope this letter find you well' (should be 'finds'), 'you will be amaze' (should be 'amazed'), and 'may you can apply' (should be 'maybe you could apply'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over verb forms and collocations to reach a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('this letter find') and tense usage ('you have mention'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors, such as 'all over the Canada' (should be 'all over Canada'). To improve, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical consistency and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately. Despite these errors, the writing remains understandable throughout.
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