Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Friend,

I am writing this letter to inform you that My workplace has one spot and the interviews are still conducting. During our call you mentioned that you are looking for a job in early childhood education field. As a early childhood educator, you have to play different roles. The main duties are positive environment, children's interest based activities, basic needs and to make them feel more safe and confident. Although You provided private classes for children back home. I think this is the best opportunity for you to secure your place in this field. Additionally, The positive point is you have relevant job experience in this field for more than 5 years which you can highlight in your resume. You can apply for this job either online or in person. For the online application, you can search on indeed with Bright Path Kids Daycare name or you can also visit in person with resume. I am looking forward to hearing your prompt response.

Yours faithfully'

Jashanpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and providing application instructions. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention the duties of an educator, the description is a bit fragmented. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanations are more fully developed and cohesive. You successfully maintained a consistent purpose throughout the letter, and the information provided is relevant to the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is generally coherent, and the progression of ideas is logical. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally' and 'Although' to link your thoughts. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as a single block of text. For a formal or semi-formal letter, it is better to separate the introduction, the main body points, and the closing into distinct paragraphs. This would significantly improve the readability and the overall structure of your response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'early childhood education' and 'relevant job experience'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'interviews are still conducting' (should be 'being conducted') and 'make them feel more safe' (should be 'safer'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and transition phrases would help elevate your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as the incorrect use of articles ('a early childhood educator' should be 'an early childhood educator') and capitalization errors ('My workplace', 'The positive point'). Additionally, the phrase 'interviews are still conducting' is grammatically incorrect as it uses the active voice where the passive is required. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will help improve your accuracy.

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