Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear John,

Hope this letter finds you in pink of your health. I am writing this letter to inform you about the availability of a job in local area which is suitable as per your qualification.

Yesterday, I read an advertisement about the need of 'security guard' in our community. This job demand flexible working hours especially at night, qualified with police clearance and confident to handle an emergency situation. I believe this job is perfectly fit your qualification. Moreover, you have two years experience in abroad. It will provide stable position along with high wage, promotion as per work, additional offers on occasion and pension after retirement. Due to all benefits, you can secure your future.

I will send you admission form before applying it online. Then, you can go through once and read all instruction, After that mention the reference, it will help to receive this job. Lastly, submit it on the given website.

I hope you would take my suggestion into your consideration and act accordingly.

Your's Sincerdy,

Arpan.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and detailing the application process. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the description of the job is quite brief, and the explanation of the application process is slightly confusing (e.g., 'admission form' is not the standard term for a job application). To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanations are more detailed and use terminology that is more precise for the context of a job application.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Lastly' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical, and there are instances where the connection between ideas could be smoother. For instance, the transition between the job description and the application process is abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that your sentences flow naturally into one another will help you achieve a higher score in this area.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message clearly. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'in pink of your health' (an incorrect idiom), 'perfectly fit your qualification' (should be 'fits your qualifications'), and 'admission form' (should be 'application form'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage. Focusing on learning common collocations related to employment will significantly improve your lexical range and accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'in local area' (missing article), 'two years experience in abroad' (incorrect preposition/usage), and 'read all instruction' (missing plural). Additionally, there are punctuation and spelling issues, such as 'Your's Sincerdy'. To improve, focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with articles, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading your work for these small but frequent errors will help you achieve a higher band score.

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