Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Raj,

I hope you are doing well, as you asked me about a job in the bank sector in my city, I found that job for you. It is a big bank and international bank which has approximately 50 employees. Your work just involves customer services, files management and accounts checking.

You always say me that you are interested in finance and you want to become a finance master. This job will be suitable for you and your future and develop your communication skills, get confidence. This is your dream job that will fulfill your all desires.

I read about this job in the newspaper, you can apply on www.hp.combank and a degree of master that you already have, and a reference from the previous company is required as I know you already worked in a bank for two years, therefore apply as soon as possible before 10 August,2026.

I am excited to hearing from you.

Yours Best Friend

Amul

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully describe the job, explain why it is suitable for your friend, and provide instructions on how to apply. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed; for instance, the explanation of the application process is a bit vague, and the connection between the job and your friend's 'desires' could be more specific. To reach a higher band, ensure that your supporting details are fully expanded to provide a more comprehensive response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on one of the required points. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'therefore' and 'as', to link your thoughts. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes a bit mechanical or repetitive. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the transition between sentences is smoother. The referencing is generally clear, though some sentence structures could be more varied to enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'international bank', 'customer services', and 'communication skills'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'finance master' (which is not a standard term) and 'say me' (should be 'tell me'). Additionally, 'bank sector' is better expressed as 'banking sector'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit your ability to demonstrate a more sophisticated or precise range of vocabulary. Focusing on collocations and more natural phrasing will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I hope you are doing well, as you asked me...' (a comma splice), 'fulfill your all desires' (incorrect word order), and 'I am excited to hearing from you' (should be 'to hear'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and common verb patterns, such as 'look forward to hearing' or 'excited to hear'. Increasing the accuracy of your complex sentences will also be beneficial.

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