Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear XXX...

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to inform you about a job vacancy, as you reached out to me last week that you were trying to find a new job. So, there is one of my friend who works at New York fries at the Coquitlam Central mall. She told me that currently they are hiring and i thought it is the best opportunity for you to get into it as you told me that you would like to work in food court. In this job they will train you how to interact with people, take orders and preparing the food. According to me, i feels like that this will be a great chance to improve your social skills as you will interact with new people and it will boost your confidence. I will give you her contact number so that you can reach out to her and you discuss about the job duties in detail. Please let me know if you are interested in the job so that i can give you her contact number.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and providing instructions on how to apply. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention the job involves 'interacting with people' and 'preparing food', more specific details about the company culture or the specific role would have strengthened the response. Additionally, the letter is written as a single block of text, which makes it feel less structured. To improve, ensure each bullet point is clearly developed and separated into distinct paragraphs to better guide the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is generally easy to follow, but it lacks paragraphing. In IELTS writing, even in a letter, you should use paragraphs to separate the introduction, the body points, and the closing. The use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic, relying heavily on simple conjunctions like 'and' or 'so'. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') and ensure that your ideas are grouped logically into paragraphs, with one paragraph dedicated to each of the three bullet points provided in the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific vocabulary such as 'job vacancy', 'hiring', and 'social skills'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'get into it' (which is informal and slightly unnatural in this context) and 'According to me' (which is a common error; 'In my opinion' or 'I think' is preferred). To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'one of my friend' (should be 'one of my friends'), 'i feels like' (subject-verb agreement error), and inconsistent capitalization of the pronoun 'I'. Additionally, the sentence 'as you reached out to me last week that you were trying to find a new job' is slightly awkward. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency and accuracy of your writing.

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