Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Rohan,

I hope you are doing well. I got your letter and I am excited to share an opportunity in my company for a customer advisor.

When I saw this job posting, I immidately thought about you. I saw this online in our company portal as this role requires a bachelor degree, which you already have .This posting for a customer advisor for our company.It requires to communicate with managers and supervisors to improve company’s production.

I am pretty much sure this job is suitable for you as you already have an education and experience for it .That will make you most compatible candidate

I can give you my HR email address you can submit your resume. If you wish I can give you my reference also.

Yours faithfully

Raj

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

You have addressed all three bullet points: describing the job, explaining its suitability, and providing application instructions. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which significantly impacts the development of your ideas. The description of the job is somewhat vague, and the explanation of why it is suitable for your friend lacks depth. To improve, you should expand on the specific duties of the role and provide more detailed reasons why your friend's background makes them a strong candidate. Because the response is under-length, it does not fully satisfy the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure, with a clear opening, body paragraphs, and a closing. However, the paragraphing is inconsistent and the flow between ideas is somewhat mechanical. For example, the transition between the job description and the suitability section is abrupt. While you use some cohesive devices, they are quite basic. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your sentences and paragraphs more fluidly, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and lacks variety. You rely on simple phrasing such as 'I saw this' and 'I can give you'. There are also minor spelling errors, such as 'immidately' (immediately). To improve, try to incorporate more precise and professional vocabulary related to job applications and workplace communication. Using a broader range of synonyms and collocations would help demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language and make your writing more engaging for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'requires a bachelor degree' (missing 'a'), 'This posting for a customer advisor for our company' (fragmented sentence), and 'you already have an education and experience for it' (missing article). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of your message. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage to improve your accuracy.

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