Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear karan ,

Hope you are well! Its my pleasure writing to you after a long time and you will be more pleased after reading this letter. Its about the new vacancy in the bake2day bakery of a senior bake artist the position you have always wanted to obtain.

The job involves doing multitasking preparing ,baking the items and performing cleaning tasks rapidly. It involves making the different flavors of cakes, bagels and sandwiches, you must have to deal with the high temperatures of oven and must be more careful of safety precautions and uniform.

I found this job most suited for you because when we use to study and you are studying hotel management you use to bring a lot of homemade dishes for me which are extremely delicious . I have always wanted to eat more and more made out of your hand , you have such a great talent hidden in you now it's time to deliver it.

To apply for the position go to the official website of bake2day select the location and the position and just upload your resume under the specified job position, if you need any help don't hesitate to contact me.

Your's lovingly

Arsh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly described the job role at the bakery, explained why your friend's background in hotel management makes them a suitable candidate, and provided clear instructions on how to apply. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, maintaining a friendly and encouraging persona throughout. The ideas are well-developed and relevant to the task requirements, ensuring the reader understands both the nature of the vacancy and the reasoning behind your recommendation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each serving a clear purpose. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'The job involves' and 'I found this job most suited', which help guide the reader through your points. However, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words. Some transitions feel slightly abrupt, and the punctuation, particularly the comma usage in the second paragraph, occasionally disrupts the natural flow of the text. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using specific terms like 'vacancy', 'multitasking', and 'resume'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'made out of your hand' (should be 'homemade' or 'your own cooking') and 'bake artist' (which is not a standard job title). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and precise professional terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For example, 'Its my pleasure' should be 'It's', and 'when we use to study' should be 'used to study'. Additionally, there are several run-on sentences and comma splices, such as in the second paragraph where multiple clauses are joined incorrectly. While these errors rarely impede the overall meaning, they are frequent enough to limit your score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct punctuation will significantly improve your writing.

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