Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
- say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
- explain how to apply for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear john,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to job opportunity for you in my city at local company.
Firstly, however the last Tuesday I saw the advertise on the newspaper. They are hired experienced people how are knowledgeable for the accounting. They give the list of some responsibility’s. They looking for hardworking, panchual and strong computer skills.
They looking for assistance accounts for the company, how is the mange company all bill payment, employees salary, expenses, profit.
I am working with you when I came to the Spain in 2024.I know about your main subject is accounting in university and your job is also in accounting sector.your are great in the accounting so I recommend this job for you.The job time is nine to five so it’s suitable for you.
I told you how you can apply this job and what type of resume you need.fist you can apply your resume on the company website and also you can apply on indeed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and providing application instructions. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited by the language used. The description of the job is a bit repetitive and lacks professional clarity, and the explanation of why it is suitable relies on simple statements. While the task is fully addressed, the ideas could be expanded with more detail to better meet the requirements of a higher band. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a friend, though the lack of a closing sign-off is a minor omission.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes mechanical. For example, the transition 'Firstly, however' is confusing and misused. There is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas smoothly within sentences. The progression of ideas is logical, but the internal cohesion between sentences is often weak, making the writing feel somewhat disjointed. Improved use of transition words and better sentence-to-sentence flow would significantly enhance the readability of the letter.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey information with precision. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'panchual' (punctual), 'mange' (manage), and 'assistance accounts' (accounting assistant). These errors occasionally cause the reader to pause, though the overall meaning remains clear. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to the workplace and professional skills, and pay closer attention to spelling and correct word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a frequent occurrence of grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('They looking for'), article usage ('on the newspaper'), and sentence structure ('I am writing to job opportunity'). While simple sentences are generally understandable, attempts at more complex structures often result in errors that impede clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree correctly.
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