Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
- say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
- explain how to apply for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Tom,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter regarding some help for your said. How and which website and portals use during better finding job in your country.
However,Our country most of industry textile and manufacture,IT compnays. Although,I know Good experience in the manufacture industry so I can preference you are apply manufacture works like management employee and how to operate machinery.
Moreover,There are taken good matching your past experience so how to operate machinery. Therefore, These type of job more suitable your profile that's way it is proper of matching.
In addition,These days multifarious job details available in many website and app because of employees applying easily. Whole opening related application and more details which job and which type of skills required already mentione. If you interested any vacancy then apply those are job and filed require details then submit.
I hope you understand my suggestion as per job related.
Yours Faithfully,
Ravi Rathod.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points, though the development is somewhat limited. You mention a job in the manufacturing industry and explain why it suits your friend's experience. However, the instructions regarding how to apply are vague; you suggest using websites generally rather than providing specific steps for the local company mentioned. The tone is inconsistent, shifting between informal and slightly awkward phrasing. To improve, ensure that your advice is specific to the scenario provided and that you clearly explain the application process for the particular job you are recommending.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical flow between sentences is often disrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as in the second and third paragraphs. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'In addition', they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. The progression of ideas is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Improving the use of transition words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'preference you are apply' instead of 'recommend that you apply' and 'multifarious job details' which sounds unnatural in this context. You rely on basic vocabulary, and some phrases are difficult to interpret due to incorrect collocations. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and precise terminology related to job searching and professional environments. Avoid using overly complex words if you are not certain of their correct usage in a specific context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence structure, and punctuation. For example, 'Our country most of industry textile' is grammatically incorrect, and many sentences lack proper structure, making them difficult to parse. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that impede clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect prepositions.
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