Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
- say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
- explain how to apply for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Ali,
It is always good to hear from you. I am happy to know that you are doing well. In your letter, you have asked me for help to find you a white collar job in my country. You know what? I have a good news for you. My company has recently advertised about vacant jobs, which also include software development vanacies. My boss is going to expand his project, for that, more manpower is needed. About job, it would be desktop job, mainly requiring office table work. However, you may have to do occasional field work, if needed.
Luckily, your credentials are overlapping with requirements. Your would be a strong candidate for this vacancy. I definitely recommend you to apply for this. Moreover, I will try my best to help you to get this seat.
Furthermore, you can apply online on company's website. I will share the link with you. One this more, you can put my reference in your resume, that way, you will have more probability to get this job. Also sh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly described the software development role, explained why it is a good fit for your friend, and provided instructions on how to apply. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the response ends abruptly with 'Also sh', suggesting an incomplete thought or a failure to proofread. While the task requirements are met, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanations are fully fleshed out and that the letter concludes in a natural, complete manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is generally coherent, and the progression of ideas is logical. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Luckily' to connect your points. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as one block of text. For a formal or semi-formal letter, it is essential to use clear paragraph breaks to separate the different points (the job description, the suitability, and the application process). Additionally, the abrupt ending disrupts the flow of the final paragraph.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'credentials', 'vacancy', and 'manpower'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'good news' (should be 'good news' without 'a'), 'desktop job' (which is not standard English), and 'get this seat' (which sounds unnatural in this context). The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Focusing on more natural collocations will improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'software development vanacies' (spelling), 'Your would be a strong candidate' (incorrect pronoun usage), and 'One this more' (should be 'One more thing'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and proofread for minor slips in spelling and word order.
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