Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Himani,

I hope you're doing well.

I am writing this letter to tell you about new job opening in Niagara Parks Commission. You have asked me to help you in job search in your respective field.

So, Niagara Parks Commission has opened a requirement for Business Analytics and it requires graduation in respective area it also need someone who has proven experience in tools such as Microsoft excel, Python, Machine learning also they are looking for someone who has completed internship in Analytics field.

Anyways, I know you have all qualification I just mentioned above. I think you are perfect fit for this job. You can apply for this job on Niagara Parks Commission online job portal. You have to upload your resume and cover letter and if everything is good they might call you for the interview round. Let me know what do you think about this job opportunity.

Well, that's all for now. I can't wait to hear from you.

Best wishes,

Shubham

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You identified the job at the Niagara Parks Commission, explained the requirements (Business Analytics, Python, Excel, etc.), and provided clear instructions on how to apply via the online portal. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, maintaining a friendly and helpful persona throughout. To improve, you could expand slightly on why the job is a perfect fit by linking your friend's specific skills or past experiences more explicitly to the company's needs, rather than just stating they have the qualifications. This would add more depth to your response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the job details, then to the application process, and finally a closing. Paragraphing is used to separate these distinct ideas, which helps the reader follow your message easily. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat limited and occasionally repetitive. For example, you use 'you' and 'this job' frequently to link sentences. Incorporating a wider variety of linking words or transition phrases (e.g., 'Furthermore,' 'In addition to this,' 'Consequently') would improve the flow and make the connections between your ideas feel more sophisticated and less mechanical.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, successfully using industry-specific terms like 'Business Analytics,' 'Machine learning,' and 'resume.' However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For instance, you wrote 'opened a requirement' instead of 'has a vacancy' or 'is hiring,' and 'graduation in respective area' is slightly unnatural. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural expressions for professional recommendations would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, and your meaning is always clear. There are, however, several grammatical slips, such as missing articles ('a new job opening,' 'the Niagara Parks Commission') and minor errors in verb agreement or preposition usage ('it also need someone' should be 'it also needs someone'). Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are slightly run-on. To improve, focus on article usage and subject-verb agreement. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score in this criterion.

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