Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
- say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
- explain how to apply for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Friend,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing a letter to kindly inform you as I have one job suggestion for you. The job as a cook on a restaurant, It is suitable for you as a you have a better experience as a cook in your country. They just need full time availability and around 2 years of experience for that role so you have that better. Now you need to apply by go on person at restaurant and talk with manager of store, I will provide you contact information of store manager. I have also one reference for you to use for apply that job, One of my friend was already work there so you can use his name as a reference. I will send you their name and contact. I believe you will be hire on that store as you are matching their needs.
Thank You
Regards,
Akash
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and providing application instructions. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the description of the job is brief, and the explanation of the application process could be more detailed. While the task is fully addressed, the content lacks the depth and natural flow expected at higher bands. To improve, try to expand on the 'why' and 'how' with more descriptive language and specific details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into a single block of text, which makes it feel a bit cluttered. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the job details and finally the application steps, the lack of paragraphing is a significant weakness. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or slightly mechanical (e.g., 'I have also one...'). To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, the main body (job details and suitability), and the closing/application instructions. This will help the reader follow your ideas more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'apply by go on person at restaurant' and 'I believe you will be hire on that store'. These errors occasionally hinder the natural flow of the text. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise collocations and varied vocabulary. Instead of repeating 'job' or 'store', try using synonyms like 'position', 'vacancy', 'establishment', or 'workplace' to demonstrate a wider range of language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The letter contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'I am writing a letter to kindly inform you as I have one job suggestion' (awkward structure), 'you have a better experience' (incorrect comparative usage), and 'you will be hire' (passive voice error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors impacts the overall quality of the writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct passive voice construction will help improve your accuracy.
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