Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Aman,

I hope this letter finds you well. I received your letter in which you are asking a job that is suitable for you.

I heard a vacancy available in a departmental store. They are looking for cashier in which you duties would be attending the customers, answering their enquiries, you also need to handle the cash flows and you will be answerable to the owner of the store.

Moreover, it is a full time year around job you do not need to search for new job. I also heard that the store provides you with you health insurance and provides a one week paid vacation twice a year. Furthermore, the working hours are also flexible to work.

You must apply for this job as you already have experience in sales and customer experience. It is also related to your study which you have already done. This is the suitable job you can do.

Best wishes

Ram

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and providing instructions on how to apply. However, the third point regarding how to apply is missing specific details. You mention the job exists but do not explain the actual application process (e.g., sending a CV, visiting the store, or contacting the manager). To reach a higher band, ensure that all instructions are fully developed with concrete information. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'I also heard', which help the flow of ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the connection between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the transition between the job description and the benefits could be more integrated. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different points requested in the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'departmental store', 'enquiries', and 'flexible'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'asking a job' (should be 'asking about a job' or 'inquiring about a job') and 'the study which you have already done' (should be 'the studies you have completed'). While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural collocations would improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I heard a vacancy available' (should be 'I heard there is a vacancy') and 'you duties would be' (should be 'your duties would be'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors throughout. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of possessive adjectives.

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