Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Nimal

I hope your doing well,unfortunetly I think after finished the my study we haven't meet yet, but this news would be good news for you.as you asked before i already find a great job for in my home town.

That is a local company, they are hiring accounting managers for immediately with good English knowledge. And they offer more high salaries with if you want to company help for you settle in my country

I my mind this is great opportunity to applied this job without hesitation. All derails i mention with attachment with this letter.and also can visit their website and apply trough the job

if you satisfied you this feel free inform to me in advance .so i would may help you to get the job in my side.thank you for time and consideration. See you soon in my country after get job offer with your family

best regards

roshan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and providing instructions on how to apply. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention the job is for an 'accounting manager,' you do not elaborate on the specific duties beyond 'good English knowledge.' The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a friend, though the lack of clear paragraphing makes the structure feel a bit rushed. To improve, ensure each bullet point is developed into a full, coherent paragraph to better demonstrate your ability to communicate information clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your ideas. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'and also' and 'so,' but these are often used repetitively or incorrectly, such as in the sentence 'if you satisfied you this feel free inform to me.' The logical flow is hindered by the lack of sentence variety and the absence of clear transitions between the introduction, the body, and the conclusion. To reach a higher band, you should use distinct paragraphs for each main point and employ a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and contains several errors in word choice and collocation. For instance, you use 'more high salaries' instead of 'higher salaries' and 'in my side' instead of 'on my end.' There are also several spelling errors, such as 'unfortunetly,' 'derails,' and 'trough.' While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the frequent spelling mistakes limit your score. Expanding your vocabulary to include more natural collocations related to employment would significantly improve the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'I hope your doing well' (should be 'you're'), 'after finished the my study' (should be 'after finishing my studies'), and 'I my mind' (should be 'In my mind'). You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors in verb tense or word order, such as 'I would may help you.' To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation, and try to incorporate more varied sentence structures with greater accuracy.

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