Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Manmeet

I formally write this letter to inform you that last week I heard that there is warehouse near by my home and I think it is suitable for you because last time you tell me that you have warehouse experience. and you have packaging experience and scanning experience, and you are physically fit, so you also lift heavy boxes there and the pay is also very well there its 20 dollars per hour, and they also give some benefits to you such as paid holidays. sick leave, medical insurance too and shifts are also flexible you can choose your schedule according to you. I can help you to apply for this job firstly you made your strong resume for it in which you mention your skills on it you availability and email as well after that you need to upload your resume on their website once they review they will contact you

Thank you

Pravjyoth

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and providing instructions on how to apply. However, the tone is inconsistent. You begin with 'I formally write this letter,' which is inappropriate for a letter to a friend. A more natural opening would be 'I am writing to tell you about a job opportunity.' While the content is relevant, the development of ideas is somewhat rushed, and the lack of paragraphing makes the letter feel like a single block of text rather than a structured piece of correspondence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter lacks paragraphing, which is essential for organizing your ideas clearly. The entire response is written as one long paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow the transition between the job description, the reasons for suitability, and the application process. Furthermore, you rely heavily on the word 'and' to connect ideas, leading to long, run-on sentences. Using a wider variety of cohesive devices, such as 'Furthermore,' 'Additionally,' or 'Consequently,' would help improve the flow and logical progression of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and basic. You use phrases like 'experience' and 'you have' multiple times in close proximity. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'I formally write this letter' and 'you made your strong resume.' To improve, try to use more varied descriptive language and ensure your word choices are appropriate for the informal context of writing to a friend. Expanding your range of verbs and adjectives would help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Your writing contains several grammatical errors, particularly regarding sentence structure and punctuation. You frequently use run-on sentences where multiple independent clauses are joined only by commas or 'and,' such as '...experience, and you are physically fit, so you also lift heavy boxes there and the pay is also very well.' There are also issues with verb tense consistency and missing articles. To improve, focus on using full stops to separate distinct ideas and ensure that your subject-verb agreement is accurate throughout the letter.

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