Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Hardik,

How are you! hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to give information related your profession which you were finding job in my country. I know very well that you asked me to find a job few months ago.

I would like to know you that I recently heard a vacancy of chief store manager in one of the most popular organization which is named U.N. Mehta Institute of Cardiology in our local area which would be best suitable for your profession. I know that you did Master in commerce when we were studying in one collage together.

U.N. Mehta Institute is a very popular in not only for Hospitality but also It's possess good reputation in market. In the advertise of vacancy, They advertise this post with good salary, incentive and other allownces they would provide to employees. Also one of the most benefits items would be provided Insurance cover with whole family and Graduity which would be best toward employees. Therefore, this vacancy, it's best suitable for your profession and you should try to achieve you.

I would like to know you that how you should apply for this post. Firstly, you should go to website of U.N. Mehta. and you should choose career option and you have to fill the form of this vacancy within its deadline and you shall eligible to get the interview for this post.

Hope you understand this all matter very well and if any doubt, tell me without any hesitation.

Hope you would definitely select for this post. and I am looking forward you prompt reply.

Yours lovingly,

XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points: it describes the job, explains why it is suitable, and provides application instructions. The tone is appropriate for a friend, and the purpose is clear from the outset. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the benefits of the job. While the response addresses the prompt, the explanation of why the job is suitable relies heavily on the fact that the friend studied commerce, which could have been expanded upon with more specific details about how his skills match the role. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the depth of information could be improved to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Also one of the most benefits items' or 'Therefore, this vacancy, it's best suitable'. While the paragraphing is sufficient, the transitions between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow. The referencing is generally clear, though some phrasing makes the connections between ideas feel a bit disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to communicate the necessary information. There are attempts to use more specific terminology, such as 'vacancy', 'incentive', and 'allowances'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'give information related your profession', 'It's possess good reputation', and 'best toward employees'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do highlight a limited range of sophisticated vocabulary and a lack of precision in word usage. More attention to natural collocations would improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('It's possess'), article usage ('go to website'), and prepositional errors ('related your profession'). Some sentences are also structurally awkward, such as 'I would like to know you that how you should apply'. These errors are noticeable and occur frequently, though they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the message. A greater focus on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.

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