Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
- say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
- explain how to apply for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Ram,
Hope you are doing well. Recently, I got your letter regarding are you still unemployment that depressed me.
But good news for you, yesterday I heard a local company in my town going to start hiring in next week.
They are looking forklift driver in the department of shipping and receiving, I remember while we were studying together, you had forklift licence and you was doing a part time job in the warehouse. So, now you have experience which will be beneficial for this job. It is a wine making company and they ship their wine into other parts of country.
According to me it is a good option for you. Because you fulfill all the criteria what they are looking. So, you can go online on the website www.localwine.com and check all the formalities they required. Because we do not have much time for this job even it is nearby my home.
Warms Regards
Raju
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the job, explaining why it is suitable, and providing application instructions. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of the job duties is brief, and the application instructions are slightly vague. While the tone is appropriate for a friend, the content could be more detailed to fully satisfy the 'well-developed' requirement of higher bands. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the reader is provided with the necessary information to act on the suggestion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into a logical sequence, moving from the greeting to the job description, the reasoning, and finally the call to action. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., the frequent use of 'because' and 'so'). Paragraphing is also insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as a single block, which hinders the flow. Improving the use of transition words and breaking the text into distinct paragraphs would significantly enhance the readability and coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are some awkward phrasings, such as 'regarding are you still unemployment' and 'check all the formalities they required'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited to basic, everyday terms. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations and a wider range of vocabulary related to the workplace and professional skills, rather than relying on simple sentence structures and repetitive word choices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I heard a local company... going to start hiring in next week' (missing 'is' and 'the'), 'you had forklift licence' (missing article), and 'you was doing' (subject-verb agreement). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are noticeable and occur in simple sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is limited, with few attempts at complex sentences. Focusing on basic sentence construction, articles, and subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy and overall score.
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