Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Raman,

This letter to find you good health and high spirits.I am write the letter a friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in this country. I tell my friend availabe for job local company . They should you work very easy and good salary. You are work in WIFI company .I am make sure you work in this company.Then apply wifi and connetced wires and you completed four joban and then extra profit because one job completed 30$ extra in you.

I will think you the job would be suitabe for him.you are in good personality and you understand the responsibilities.This job is better than for you.

The apply for job open the browser and go to work.com app. Than you will fill all data and apply the job.

Best wishes,

Balraj singh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response covers all three bullet points from the prompt: it mentions the job at a local company involving WiFi installation, explains suitability citing personality and responsibility, and outlines the application process using a browser. However, the tone is inappropriate for a friendly letter, opening with awkward stock phrases ('This letter to find you good health...'). Furthermore, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement at 147 words, resulting in a necessary length penalty. Ideas are presented but remain basic and under-developed due to the restricted output and linguistic limitations. Therefore, it meets the criteria for Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks a clear logical progression and suffers from severely disjointed sentences and paragraphing. While basic cohesive devices and pronouns are attempted, referencing is often confusing, such as shifting abruptly between third and second person ('They should you work...'). The organisation is rudimentary, with sentences strung together without smooth transitions. Paragraph divisions are present but do not logically group connected ideas together effectively. Overall, the structural flow is heavily disrupted, matching the descriptor for Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('good', 'work', 'job'). There are frequent word choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'connetced wires', 'joban', and 'extra profit'. The writer attempts to express specific concepts like salary and application procedures, but the restricted vocabulary and spelling mistakes frequently impede communication and strain the reader. This falls squarely within Band 4.0, as the lexical range is severely limited and repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. There is a complete absence of accurate complex structures, and even simple sentences contain severe errors in verb forms, tense consistency, and sentence construction, such as 'I am write the letter' and 'I will think you the job would be suitabe for him'. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic. Because errors are extremely frequent and often distort the intended meaning, the writing aligns with Band 4.0.

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