Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
- say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
- explain how to apply for the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
dear friend!
hope you will be fine i received your letter and read your letter carefully yes in my options there are a one job that i think for you it's suitable and i shared with you some informations about the job first of job is about photography and i know you are expert in Photography so i think this job sa suitable for you before your letter received to me i meet one person on footpath he is a photographer but he is worried i juts saw his expressions and i ask to him why you look so worried he said i need a man who is perfect at a photography i have another works i don't have any time for photography but i need a pictures of it but i am worried who will be my take responsibility of photography i saw him and say yes he is my friend
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt, though the development is quite brief and imaginative. You successfully tell your friend about the job involving photography, state why it is suitable because they are an expert in photography, and explain how to apply through the chance meeting on the footpath with the worried person. However, the narrative about meeting someone on the footpath feels a bit unrealistic and lacks formal application details, which slightly limits the depth of task fulfilment. Overall, the requirements of the prompt are met adequately, positioning this response securely at Band 5.5 to 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text suffers significantly from a lack of proper punctuation, capitalisation, and paragraphing. It is written as one long, continuous run-on sentence without periods or capital letters, which makes progression and logical organisation extremely difficult for the reader to follow. Cohesive devices are largely missing or replaced by endless comma splices and conjunctions like 'and'. Paragraphing is absent entirely. While the overall purpose of the letter can be deciphered, the mechanical faults in structure and cohesion pull this criterion down to a Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, such as 'job', 'friend', 'photography', 'worried', and 'perfect'. There are attempts to use relevant terms related to the topic, such as 'expert in Photography' and 'expressions', but word choice and collocations are often awkward, for example, 'in my options there are a one job' and 'i need a man who is perfect at a photography'. The limited range and recurring errors in word formation place this response firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the letter. The entire response consists of simple clauses strung together with conjunctions and commas, completely lacking standard punctuation such as periods, question marks, or capital letters. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('there are a one job', 'i meet one person', 'i ask to him'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions ('at a photography', 'take responsibility of photography'). The absence of sentence boundaries and frequent structural errors severely restrict the grammatical range and accuracy, meriting a Band 4.0.
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