Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves
• say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her
• explain how to apply for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

my friend assalikum my name is shahbaz ali i am working in namal university as electrical engineering i am just making the robot and other things and i know it is very helpfull for me and i enjoyed in this task and we lern some thing new from this task and i invite you work in this university and you will lern somthing new from this task and this is very helpfull in our future and yuo can mete some some new peoples and you enjoy our life in namal university lab nad you apply for new teste and you can new exprement and you learn somthing new from this.

and finally i am saying how to apply for this job frist you can write the email for job and he will inform your job and then he take your interview and he ask some questions abour your field .

and finally he can send email about you are eligable for job.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make a relevant attempt to describe a job at Namal University and explain how to apply, so the reader can identify the general purpose of the letter. However, the job itself is not clearly specified: “making the robot and other things” gives only a vague idea of the duties, and the invitation to work in the university lab does not explain the position. Your reason for thinking it suits your friend is also general, focusing on learning new things and meeting people rather than linking the role to their skills or experience. The application steps—emailing, attending an interview, and receiving a decision—are present but lack practical details. Develop each point with clear, specific information and address your friend directly throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response contains a basic sequence: it introduces the university work, gives reasons the friend might enjoy it, and then explains an application process. The final section is signposted with “and finally,” which helps indicate a shift in topic. However, most ideas are crowded into one long opening paragraph, and several points repeat, especially learning something new and finding the work helpful. Connections between ideas are often unclear, so the reader has to work to follow the message. Use separate paragraphs for the job, its suitability, and the application steps, and connect each point in a clear order. Avoid repeating the same reason and use pronouns or linking phrases carefully so their references are clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “job,” “university,” “lab,” “interview,” and “field,” which makes the general topic understandable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with “learn something new” and “helpful” appearing several times. Some word choices and phrases are unclear or unsuitable for a friendly job letter, such as “apply for new teste” and “you can new exprement.” Frequent spelling errors, including “helpfull,” “lern,” and “eligable,” also make the message less clear and reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Build a more precise range for describing duties and qualifications, and check spelling and natural word combinations before sending.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas using “and,” “because”-like reasoning, and time-ordering in the application process, but most sentences rely on simple structures, with little variety. Errors in sentence formation and verb forms are frequent: “i am working … as electrical engineering” does not clearly express the writer’s role, while “you will lern” and “he take your interview” show problems with verb forms and agreement. Missing or incorrect articles and punctuation also make sentence boundaries difficult to identify. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas accurately. For example, separate the job description from the application instructions and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and full stops.

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