Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Dave

I hope you're doing well and having a great week.

I'm writing this letter to inform you about the job opportunity in my country that you asked me before. I have heared that a local company is hiring a Data Analyst in my city. The job has some basic responsibilities, including data cleaning, analyzing and visulizations.

Since you have a masters degree in Computer Science and have previous experience in the similar field, I believe it will be perfect role as per your educational background. Besides that, the company has a great health benefits plan and standard salary, which wont dissapoint you I promised.

I'd ask you to apply for this job from their websites and they have a very straightforward job portal. I'll share the details about the application procedure, so you can apply directly.

Let me know if you have any challenges, while you're applying. I'll be more than happy to assist you.

All the best,

Ravin

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion7.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points and maintain an appropriate, friendly tone. You identify the role as a Data Analyst and mention data cleaning, analysis and visualisation; you also connect the job to Dave’s computer science degree and related experience. The application advice, however, is less fully developed: “apply … from their websites” is vague, and “I’ll share the details” does not actually provide the steps or explain what information to submit. The benefits and salary add useful context, but “standard salary” gives little indication of what to expect. To strengthen the letter further, include a clear application route, such as the company’s careers page, and specify the documents or deadline if known.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: you introduce the opportunity, explain why it suits Dave, then discuss applying and offer further help. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking phrases such as “Since” and “Besides that” make the relationships between ideas easy to follow. The opening and closing also fit the friendly purpose. Some connections could be more precise: “I’ll share the details about the application procedure” follows advice to use the website but leaves the actual next step unclear. The phrase “Let me know if you have any challenges, while you’re applying” also has an unnecessary pause that interrupts the flow. Make the application paragraph more specific and use transitions that clarify exactly how the reader should proceed.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “job opportunity,” “responsibilities,” “data cleaning,” “health benefits plan” and “application procedure.” These choices make the purpose clear, and the role-specific terms help the letter feel relevant. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce accuracy, including “heared,” “visulizations” and “dissapoint.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural: “standard salary” and “apply … from their websites” do not communicate the intended meaning as naturally as they could. Aim for accurate spelling and more idiomatic collocations, especially when describing the application process and employment conditions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of the message remains easy to understand. For example, the sentence beginning “Since you have a masters degree…” gives a reason for your recommendation, while “I’ll be more than happy to assist you” is a clear, well-formed offer. Some grammatical errors remain. In “it will be perfect role,” an article is needed before “perfect role”; “in the similar field” should use a different article pattern; and “I promised” does not fit the sentence structure or intended meaning. The sentence about applying also needs a clearer grammatical construction. Review articles, possessives and clause structure, and proofread punctuation so that the more complex sentences are as controlled as the simpler ones.

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