Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These days, topic of it is crucial to keep neat your house and your place of work a long with organised and in the correct place has become a major debate to among certain people. I will discuss this essay and give my opinion why it is important these things.

On the one hand, the main reason why this is vital, because this is for our good, safety and health and for the others people who visiting at your home or workplace For example, as long as your house is keeping tidy you can calm and free worries and your family and Friends will safe. At the same time your workplace as well should to keep clean like in your house and also need to organised all the things in the right place. Furthermore, they can prevent accident and keep safe if all your things in the home and workplace is organized in the correct place.

On the other hand, the simply of cleaning and organized every day is a must to all indivuduals they should to habit this kind of routine for themselves. People should not to lazy about cleaning and keeping their things organized. For instance, those things are danger like knife in the kitchen or scissor and other things that will causes of accident, if there is a child to pick a knife in the lower place it will causes accident because of neglect, that is why organizing is really important in overall.

In conclusion, I believed this keeping tidy at home and place of work is really crucial a long with organizing everything in the correct place is a good thing for all individuals and society to mitigate their life and to keep safe and for their family and frieds as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Malinaw ang paninindigan mo: mahalaga para sa iyo ang pagpapanatiling malinis at maayos ng mga tahanan at lugar ng trabaho. Nagbibigay ka ng mga kaugnay na dahilan, kabilang ang kaligtasan, pagbawas ng pag-aalala, at pag-iwas sa mga aksidente; nakatutulong ding ilarawan ang panganib ang halimbawa ng batang umaabot sa kutsilyo. Gayunman, bahagi lamang ng gawain ang lubusang natalakay: basta mo lamang sinasabi na nakapagpapakalma ang kaayusan, sa halip na ipaliwanag ito, at maikli ang talakay sa lugar ng trabaho at wala itong tiyak na halimbawa. Sinasabi rin sa pambungad na tatalakayin mo ang isyu, pero hindi malinaw na inilalahad ang opinyon mo hanggang sa bandang huli. Para mapahusay ang sagot, sabihin agad ang iyong pananaw sa simula at ipaliwanag ang bawat pangunahing dahilan gamit ang mas tiyak na halimbawa o bunga.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Makikilala ang estruktura ng sagot: may pambungad, dalawang talata sa katawan na sinisimulan ng “On the one hand” at “On the other hand,” at pangwakas. Karaniwang may kaugnayan sa paksa ang mga ideya, at kasunod ng punto tungkol sa pag-aayos ng mga mapanganib na bagay ang halimbawa tungkol sa kaligtasan. Gayunman, limitado ang pag-usad ng talakay: inuulit ng dalawang talata sa katawan ang kahalagahan ng kaayusan at kaligtasan, samantalang hindi malinaw ang ipinahihiwatig na pagkakaiba ng “On the other hand.” May ilang hindi maayos o malabong pag-uugnay, gaya ng “Furthermore, they can prevent accident,” kung saan hindi tiyak kung ano ang tinutukoy ng “they.” Bumuo ng bawat talata sa paligid ng magkakaibang dahilan at gumamit lamang ng mga pariralang pang-ugnay kapag tumpak nilang ipinakikita ang ugnayan ng mga ideya.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Gumagamit ka ng ilang bokabularyong may kaugnayan sa paksa, kabilang ang “tidy,” “organised,” “prevent accident,” at “routine,” kaya nauunawaan ang pangunahing paksa. Gayunman, kapansin-pansin ang mga pagkakamali sa pagpili ng salita at karaniwang pagsasama ng mga salita, at kung minsan ay nagiging mahirap sundan ang kahulugan. Kabilang sa mga halimbawa ang “the simply of cleaning,” “mitigate their life,” at “a major debate to among certain people.” May mga mali rin sa baybay, gaya ng “indivuduals” at “frieds,” pati hindi pare-parehong paggamit ng malaking titik sa “Friends.” Bumuo ng mas tumpak na hanay ng mga parirala para sa paksang ito, gaya ng “maintain a tidy space,” “reduce the risk of accidents,” at “improve daily life,” at maingat na suriin ang baybay at anyo ng mga salita.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Sinusubukan mong gumamit ng mga payak at mas mahahabang pangungusap, kabilang ang kondisyunal na halimbawang nagsisimula sa “if there is a child,” pero madalas na mali ang pagkakabuo ng mas masalimuot na estruktura at marami ang pagkakamali. Halimbawa, walang kumpletong estrukturang panggramatika ang “the main reason why this is vital, because,” samantalang mali ang padron ng pandiwa sa “your workplace … should to keep clean.” Problematiko rin ang pagtutugma ng simuno at pandiwa at ang pagkakabuo ng pangungusap sa “all your things … is organized” at “it will causes accident.” Hindi pare-pareho ang paggamit ng bantas, lalo na kapag pinagdurugtong ang magkakahiwalay na pangungusap. Magsanay munang bumuo ng mga payak na pangungusap nang tama bago magdagdag ng mga sugnay na nakadepende sa ibang sugnay; suriin ang anyo ng pandiwa pagkatapos ng mga modal verb at tiyaking may malinaw na simuno at pangunahing pandiwa ang bawat pangungusap.

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