Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people believe, it is very essential to keep our workplace and also our home clean and well - organised. In my view, it represents their personality.

First of all, the person living at home is the one who takes care of the household chores. If the person earning money for their people comes back to home and they find unorganised room, washroom is not clean, kitchen utencils lying in the wash basin, and even bedsheets not changed, it affects their mood and make them feel frustrated. Moreover, that person is a tidy person. For instance,that person in offie is keeping his surrounding always clean. And also there is staff who clean every hour to maintain the evnironment.

There are many people who do not focus on tidiness, they might be a little lazy or they haven't enough time to do things. These are the things in very common, when after eating and using the things, some of them throwing a pile of rubbish on the ground. Generally in homes, there are children who always spills the things everywhere in the house but that is the exception case. Because in abroad parents are very particular to teaching and tend to develop these habit from the early ages as in India, it is quite opposite only with the few people. For example, when my daughter used to study in abroad, their teacher always made them learn to settle their things own after doing the activities.

In conclusion, Tidiness is a really good habit among the people. If people will keep the home and workplace clean then they could really contribute to support their community, street and country. And it is always good learning for students as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your opinion is stated clearly in the opening: tidiness “represents their personality,” and the conclusion reinforces that it is a good habit. You also give relevant examples, including the effect of an untidy home on someone’s mood and your daughter’s teacher encouraging students to put things away. However, the response only partly develops the question of keeping both the home and workplace organised. The workplace is mentioned briefly, while much of the discussion shifts to household chores, children, and differences between India and abroad. Some claims, such as tidy people contributing to their country, are not explained. Develop a more direct reason for your view and support each main point with a clear, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “Moreover,” and “For instance” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression within the paragraphs is not always clear: the first body paragraph moves from household chores to a worker’s mood, then to office cleanliness and cleaning staff without explaining how these points connect. The second paragraph combines laziness, rubbish, children, cultural comparisons, and a school example. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, and references such as “that person” are unclear. Group related ideas together and use topic sentences so each paragraph develops one main reason.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “tidiness,” “household chores,” “frustrated,” and “maintain the environment.” These choices show an attempt to discuss both personal habits and shared spaces. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning less natural: “comes back to home,” “utencils lying in the wash basin,” and “settle their things own” are examples. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “offie,” “evnironment,” and “spills” where the intended form is “spill.” Build a bank of natural phrases for describing organisation and cleanliness, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional forms (“If people will keep the home…”) and clauses introduced by “when” and “because.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “it affects their mood and make them feel frustrated” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “there are children who always spills” also has incorrect agreement. “They haven't enough time” and “when after eating and using the things” show problems with sentence construction. Work on agreement, verb forms, and building complete clauses; then punctuate sentence boundaries carefully, especially where several ideas are joined together.

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