Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many prople state it is significent to meintain your home and yor palce of work is neat everything organised in addition in the correct place.

Overall, my point of weiv is garee due to when you are leving in a place mean home you want this place you maintain neat when you live in a clean invorments you whealthly stong and you immunity systen is furthermore stable.

The other workepalce is neat yor surrounding is looking very good, anyone apreciate you because yoy envorment is so looking grest. You arrangment of ypur office means workingplace is also good while everything is also placed in the correct palce. Your surronding was miantain always clean because you live in that.

My point of weiv anything whereas you avilable you want organised everything correct due to when you live in a socity here people friendly and pieceful in this towen you happy but the peoples have maintain untidy envorment in this place have causes alot of deaseses anyone and the peoples of this socity have ill anytime.

Fainally we have want my home and the workplace both mentain neat and clean because we have safed many deases and other challanges.It our responsiblites being a humans, i have want mentain our envorment clean and greeny.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear general opinion in favour of keeping both the home and workplace tidy, and you mention relevant benefits such as health, a pleasant working environment, and responsibility. However, the response addresses the task only partially: these points are mostly asserted rather than explained or supported with a specific example. For instance, the claim that a clean environment makes people healthier is not developed, and the discussion of society and disease is difficult to connect clearly to the question. The conclusion repeats your position but adds little. The response is also 39 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your reasons. Explain each main benefit and include a concrete example from experience or observation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, paragraphs about the home and workplace, a further point about the wider community, and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression between ideas is not always clear, and several sentences are difficult to follow, particularly the paragraph beginning “My point of weiv anything whereas you avilable.” Connections between claims are often unclear, while words such as “because,” “while,” and “due to” do not consistently show the intended relationship. The conclusion also repeats earlier ideas rather than bringing them together. Use one clear topic sentence per paragraph, then explain and illustrate that point in a logical order; choose linking expressions only when their relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “organised,” “workplace,” “surrounding,” “immunity system,” and “responsibilities.” This shows an effort to discuss cleanliness, health, and social effects. However, the usable range is limited and many spelling errors make the message harder to understand, for example “prople,” “significent,” “envorment,” and “deaseses.” Some word combinations are also unclear or unnatural, such as “you whealthly stong” and “looking grest.” These problems sometimes strain the reader’s effort to understand your meaning. Build a reliable set of topic words and check spelling, word forms, and common combinations. For example, use “maintain a tidy workspace” and “reduce the spread of illness” rather than assembling phrases word by word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and relationships using clauses with “because,” “when,” and “while,” and you include both short statements and longer sentences. However, the range of sentence structures is very limited, and errors are frequent enough to obscure meaning. For example, “my point of weiv is garee due to when you are leving” does not form a clear grammatical sentence, while “anyone apreciate you” has an agreement problem. Articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “we have want my home and the workplace both mentain.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with one clear subordinate clause. Check that each sentence has a subject and a correctly formed verb, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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