Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In order to look responsible and profesionnal in your home or workplace, it's important to give a good image about yourself for the people, doesn't mean to be perfect or change your attitudes to please them, but to be represented in a decent way; And that's why I think it's important to keep your place tidy and organised, not only for people around you but also for your well-being.

One of the main reasons why I believe that a person should take care of his workplace and home is that this behavior help him mentally to be practical and productive during the day, because when a person's desk is organised he won't bother himself of searching for a device or a paper that he forgot where he put it, otherwise he will be struggling a lot during his tasks and this will affect his work quality, without forget to mention that this impact also the thoughts processing, someone desk is tidy will have a clearer mind than someone starting his day with disorder around him. A good illustration to this is someone who get up in the morning to find his cuisine tidy, he will start making his breakfast right away and enjoy the first moments of the day which eventually raise up his mood, than someone have to wash dished of yesterday before begin preparing what to eat, and if he was in a hurry this will even make things worst.

Another point to mention is the impression you leave for the other people, while this shouldn't be your priority but the people's view matters too, and when someone notice that your office or your house is completely messy this is a bad impression to show, especially for people you meet for the first time and who are not too familiar with you, because these people will think that you're not worth to do work with because you probably going to slow them down or be responsible of some mistakes, plus that this show how responsible you are which will impact your credibility. An example of this situation, if you are willing to buy a product in a store or profit from a service in a agency, and you went on to find chaos everywhere and you don't know where to go, probably you won't be excited to proceed with that decision because of the first impression you got.

From these examples I think its important for mature people to pay more attention to their private places, because it's like a mirror to themselves, and this will show people how competent you are, which will either benefits you or turn against you, that's why is necessary to maintain a certain level of organisation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your position is clear throughout: you support keeping homes and workplaces organised, for both personal well-being and the impression made on others. You address the question directly and extend your main reasons with relevant examples, such as finding a tidy kitchen in the morning and encountering disorder in a service business. These examples help explain why organisation matters rather than merely listing benefits. The discussion of productivity and first impressions is particularly relevant. Some claims, however, are broad—for example, that people may think someone is “not worth to do work with”—and the final point about organisation reflecting competence largely repeats the earlier argument. More precise explanation of when tidiness matters, and a little more development of the examples, would make the support more consistently convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs develop separate reasons, and the conclusion restates your position. The progression from personal productivity to other people’s impressions is logical, and signposts such as “One of the main reasons” and “Another point to mention” make the organisation easy to follow. However, some sentences are very long and contain several linked ideas, which makes the relationships between points less clear. The first body paragraph, for instance, moves from finding items to mental clarity and then to breakfast without clear separation. Some linking phrases, including “From these examples,” are rather general, while repeated references to “someone” can make the flow mechanical. Use clearer sentence boundaries and more precise referencing to strengthen cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary to discuss organisation, productivity and reputation, including “well-being,” “productive,” “credibility” and “first impression.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, but some are inaccurate or unnatural: “give a good image about yourself,” “thoughts processing,” and “profit from a service” do not express the intended meanings naturally. Spelling errors such as “profesionnal” and “dished” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling, rather than relying on direct translations. More precise vocabulary would make your arguments sound more fluent and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including conditional clauses (“if you are willing to buy a product”) and explanations using “because” and “which.” This allows you to express reasons and examples, but some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries remain. For example, “this behavior help him” needs subject–verb agreement, and “someone desk is tidy” needs a possessive form. The opening sentence joins several clauses with commas and a semicolon in a way that makes the structure difficult to control; several later sentences are similarly overloaded. Practise building complex sentences with clear clause boundaries, and check agreement and articles during revision. Greater accuracy in these patterns would make your meaning easier to follow.

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