Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's fast-paced life, you can not find a clean space around us. Many people think that it is important to keep a neat and clean space at home and job that they can organized in a good manner. Here, I am discussing points about this statement and giving my opinion after this.

The first and foremost reason is that it is necessary to clean our house regularly because if we can not do home cleaning, then there is a possibility of insects like ants, cockroaches, and many more, so we should clean our household things in our daily routine. Also, they can not clean their house because of that insects are finding their way in food and this food are going through children stomach and spread illness in the whole house. To illustrate, there is 70% of food problems happen because of food insects in the world.

Second of all, talking about space at work are too small so if we can not clean this space that there is a possible of mosquito over there and it is possible of make you illness. Moreover, many times people slip because of oil on the floor. For instance, 80% of accident are happen due to sleep because many people are working in the mechanical field so they are not clean the place there they work and due to this, place are making sleepary day by day and accident are occur.

In my opinion, cleaning plays a vital role in our daily routine. it is important to prevent illness and accidents at home and in the workplace. Also, you can find a stuff easily whenever you need such as passport, insurance and many important things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the topic and give a clear overall opinion that keeping spaces clean is important, especially to prevent illness and accidents and to find belongings easily. The examples of insects contaminating food and oil on a workplace floor are relevant, so the response fulfils the main task. However, the discussion focuses mainly on cleanliness and safety, while the prompt also asks about keeping things organised and in the correct place; this aspect receives only brief attention in the final sentence. Some support is also unclear or insufficiently explained, particularly the claims that 70% of food problems and 80% of accidents have these causes. Develop the organisation point with a specific example and explain or qualify statistics rather than presenting unsupported figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs about the home and workplace, and a concluding opinion. This gives the reader an overall path through your ideas, and signposts such as “The first and foremost reason” and “Moreover” help show relationships. However, some linking is mechanical, and several sentences are difficult to follow because the references and cause-and-effect connections are unclear. For example, “Also, they can not clean their house because of that insects are finding their way in food” does not clearly identify who “they” refers to or how the ideas connect. Use simpler, more direct transitions and make each paragraph develop one main point in a clear sequence. A separate paragraph on organisation would also improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “insects,” “illness,” “workplace,” “accident,” and “prevent.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to understand. Examples include “food problems,” “food insects,” “possible of mosquito,” and “making sleepary.” Some expressions, such as “clean space” and “clean the place,” are repeated rather than varied. Aim to learn natural collocations for hygiene, organisation, and workplace safety, and check spelling and word forms before submitting. More precise vocabulary would make your examples clearer without requiring more complicated ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer sentences with reasons and examples, so there is some variety in structure. The main message is generally understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction recur. For example, “they can organized” needs a passive form, while “this food are going” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “there is a possibility of insects,” the following explanation is also built into an awkward, incomplete sentence. Capitalisation after the full stop in “it is important” should be corrected. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear main clause, then add a reason using “because” or “which.” Check agreement and verb forms carefully, especially in longer sentences.

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